Re: [i2rs] Kathleen Moriarty's Discuss on draft-ietf-i2rs-protocol-security-requirements-07: (with DISCUSS and COMMENT)

William Atwood <william.atwood@concordia.ca> Fri, 19 August 2016 20:16 UTC

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Subject: Re: [i2rs] Kathleen Moriarty's Discuss on draft-ietf-i2rs-protocol-security-requirements-07: (with DISCUSS and COMMENT)
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See suggestion below:-

On 19/08/2016 12:55 PM, Susan Hares wrote:

> 
> New:
> 
> /   A non-secure transport can be used for publishing telemetry data or
                             may
> 
>    other operational state that was specifically indicated to non-
                                                                be non-
> 
>    confidential in the data model. /
> 
>  
can = it is possible to do it
may = you have permission to do it

I offer two choices for the second correction:
s/to/to be/  (as indicated)
s/to/as/     (which is perhaps better than my first suggestion)

  Bill

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