[i2rs] Trivial comments on draft-ietf-i2rs-ephemeral-state-21

Robert Wilton <rwilton@cisco.com> Wed, 09 November 2016 17:05 UTC

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Subject: [i2rs] Trivial comments on draft-ietf-i2rs-ephemeral-state-21
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Hi,

I was just reviewing the latest version of this draft to see what had 
changed since my last review and spotted a few potential trivial typos, 
in case you have time to correct them:

1. Last paragraph of 1. Introduction:

  "Section 7 provided" => " Section 7 provides"

2. 1.

"filtered evens" => "filtered events"?

7. Ephemeral-REQ-12

"(which includes indicating data node the collision occurred on) => 
"(which includes indicating the data node that the collision occurred on)"

Otherwise the draft looks fine to me.

Thanks,
Rob