Re: [i2rs] RtgDir review: draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l2-network-topology-13.txt

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Hi Stig, 

Thank you for the review. These nits will be fixed in the next iteration. 

As per this comment: 

"There may be some minor model issues, tracker says: Yang Validation 9 errors, 2 warnings." 

Actually, this is an issue of the IETF datatracker that only populates in IETF-defined modules. In particular, IEEE-related modules are not populated in as revealed by the error message:

==
[e-mail]:31: error: module "ieee802-dot1q-types" not found in search path
==

Unless I'm mistaken, Sue has reported this issue in the write-up. Will look further on the warnings, though. 

Cheers,
Med

> -----Message d'origine-----
> De : Stig Venaas [mailto:[e-mail]]
> Envoyé : mercredi 24 juin 2020 19:07
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> Objet : RtgDir review: draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l2-network-topology-13.txt
> 
> Hello,
> 
> I have been selected as the Routing Directorate reviewer for this
> draft. The Routing Directorate seeks to review all routing or
> routing-related drafts as they pass through IETF last call and IESG
> review, and sometimes on special request. The purpose of the review is
> to provide assistance to the Routing ADs. For more information about
> the Routing Directorate, please see
> http://trac.tools.ietf.org/area/rtg/trac/wiki/RtgDir
> 
> Although these comments are primarily for the use of the Routing ADs,
> it would be helpful if you could consider them along with any other
> IETF Last Call comments that you receive, and strive to resolve them
> through discussion or by updating the draft.
> 
> Document: draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l2-network-topology-13.txt
> Reviewer: Stig Venaas
> Review Date: 2020-06-24
> IETF LC End Date: 2020-06-25
> Intended Status: Standards Track
> 
> Summary:
> This document is basically ready for publication, but has nits that
> should be considered prior to publication.
> 
> Comments:
> The document is well written and easy to read. I only found some minor
> nits that should be taken care of.
> 
> Major Issues:
> No major issues found.
> 
> Minor Issues:
> No minor issues found.
> 
> Nits:
> 
> The idnits tool found some nits; regarding references in particular.
> 
> There may be some minor model issues, tracker says: Yang Validation 9
> errors, 2 warnings.
> 
> The abstract is rather short, I think it would be worth going into a
> little more detail.
> 
> In Introduction “A sample example” should maybe just be “An example”?
> 
> For grouping l2-network-type, shouldn’t “indicates” be capitalized?
>       presence "indicates L2 Network";
> 
> For leaf maximum-frame-size, missing space before PPP
>       if L2 frame is other type (e.g.,PPP), the L2
> 
> For l2-termination-point-type, leaf tag, should say “is supported”
>       "Defines whether lag is support or not.";
> 
> In the security considerations, should be “defines”
>       The Layer 2 topology module define
> 
> In Appendix A, should say “represents”.
>       implementations, a corresponding companion module is defined that
>       represent the operational state of layer 2 network topologies.  The
> 
> Regards,
> Stig

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