Re: Yet another version of the draft

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Hi Martijn:

I worked on the old draft off-line at home last night and posted my
comments this morning.  I've just checked them against your latest draft
you sent out last night. All my comments apply to the new version too.

I also have a couple of small extra points (numbered).

Hope this helps :-)

-- Jill

1.       Small point in 2.3.1 (old number - sorry)

    - Individual contact information for site maintainer
       (administrators).

maintainer (singular) , administrators (plural)

2.       And in 2.4.1     (old number - sorry)

     - Any keywords which might be applied to the record
       that would facilitate users' finding this service.

No "'" after users

3.       You changed the wording below to acommodate the word "Details"
which I think should have been "Date" in the first place. ie - Date record
was last maintained.

*** 355,361 ****
  .IP -
  Comment.
  .IP -
! Details record was last maintained.
  .in -5
  .NH 2
  Site-specific configuration information
--- 365,371 ----
  .IP -
  Comment.
  .IP -
! Details describing when record was last maintained.
  .in -5
  .NH 2
  Site-specific configuration information

4.      Should be "data elements" in the bit you changed below.

*** 704,710 ****
  resource with the desired characteristics may be located.
  .LP
  <number> is an arbitrary number with the only restriction that all
! records with that particular sequence value are logically connected
  in a similar manner to that illustrated above.
  .LP
  The variant number need not exist when variants are not being
--- 712,718 ----
  resource with the desired characteristics may be located.
  .LP
  <number> is an arbitrary number with the only restriction that all
! data elents with that particular sequence value are logically connected
  in a similar manner to that illustrated above.
  .LP
  The variant number need not exist when variants are not being