IETF Logo Mail Archive

Re: [Iasa20] AD review of draft-ietf-iasa2-rfc4071bis-04

Bob Hinden <bob.hinden@gmail.com> Wed, 27 February 2019 16:11 UTC

Return-Path: <bob.hinden@gmail.com>
X-Original-To: iasa20@ietfa.amsl.com
Delivered-To: iasa20@ietfa.amsl.com
Received: from localhost (localhost [127.0.0.1]) by ietfa.amsl.com (Postfix) with ESMTP id 3FBB3130E82 for <iasa20@ietfa.amsl.com>; Wed, 27 Feb 2019 08:11:35 -0800 (PST)
X-Virus-Scanned: amavisd-new at amsl.com
X-Spam-Flag: NO
X-Spam-Score: -1.999
X-Spam-Level:
X-Spam-Status: No, score=-1.999 tagged_above=-999 required=5 tests=[BAYES_00=-1.9, DKIM_SIGNED=0.1, DKIM_VALID=-0.1, DKIM_VALID_AU=-0.1, FREEMAIL_FROM=0.001, RCVD_IN_DNSWL_NONE=-0.0001, SPF_PASS=-0.001, URIBL_BLOCKED=0.001] autolearn=ham autolearn_force=no
Authentication-Results: ietfa.amsl.com (amavisd-new); dkim=pass (2048-bit key) header.d=gmail.com
Received: from mail.ietf.org ([4.31.198.44]) by localhost (ietfa.amsl.com [127.0.0.1]) (amavisd-new, port 10024) with ESMTP id ipjmPZHIfYAY for <iasa20@ietfa.amsl.com>; Wed, 27 Feb 2019 08:11:33 -0800 (PST)
Received: from mail-wr1-x432.google.com (mail-wr1-x432.google.com [IPv6:2a00:1450:4864:20::432]) (using TLSv1.2 with cipher ECDHE-RSA-AES128-GCM-SHA256 (128/128 bits)) (No client certificate requested) by ietfa.amsl.com (Postfix) with ESMTPS id 9D9CB1200B3 for <iasa20@ietf.org>; Wed, 27 Feb 2019 08:11:32 -0800 (PST)
Received: by mail-wr1-x432.google.com with SMTP id l5so18604626wrw.6 for <iasa20@ietf.org>; Wed, 27 Feb 2019 08:11:32 -0800 (PST)
DKIM-Signature: v=1; a=rsa-sha256; c=relaxed/relaxed; d=gmail.com; s=20161025; h=mime-version:subject:from:in-reply-to:date:cc :content-transfer-encoding:message-id:references:to; bh=OZ9JGxnvnAkoYsZm8+m8+EBUMEFd6vynE1XT9jgbUEA=; b=QyCj8clfSeqt3fJF+hzq8MfvYOJnuCzwAv3WVduOPTCFGw5shxFySB5kM1NWvX/Nfi 2hiSESPxuBYlspLKIIEo7iIEGKzNcITUR4bCeTL+Kk8Jz67cramYiDJtxAZQY6kgvqez p64osiDByxN7xuYyDMTh3BB77EGJ92f0KmXhsFtlEeBSiJqEXBw76fFlWroGT/cNfAzM XSIH9ZHyLSlItHHb0fH8+9+br9FkQHP14GNMKfoidfdKh9AExKvYKhlytVCH9ZKB41AS hQlxgLdrU8Knhu7rQh/Y6qZ4/TdwMI5Zy3Mc/7D4Ap8YSDpO/Sy32DM5laxjPPaAmhZL nfOw==
X-Google-DKIM-Signature: v=1; a=rsa-sha256; c=relaxed/relaxed; d=1e100.net; s=20161025; h=x-gm-message-state:mime-version:subject:from:in-reply-to:date:cc :content-transfer-encoding:message-id:references:to; bh=OZ9JGxnvnAkoYsZm8+m8+EBUMEFd6vynE1XT9jgbUEA=; b=hvoa5fbCv/YOR3typz+P3clPILfOKIdZV2xmGrpB4ZYvHlu4MBeILgvzplxXdFP0Zv WFBWIceccxvrLU+DCRd5oxQqmGCnZKUw9Rpeb5HXGtGNm5xkyQZdlWGUXMkNqTbY+0gk fxS34LVQPicMg10EsguU/2KiUwtph5lAiam8jEB68bduGQDy6DW+a98aqm6CL2dZfsN0 bMM0S34pvNTn/FKGW6DHR5A4YksJG9PddBCJaBgfahrKhe0CFefLRI969YT4GHfyOxfU CMvmujgfLr4zDgbjGNtNfbbn9u7cj14tsN87mDFS5k4L7JECqikT1hh6iiOuTvAGIF6Z Uhjg==
X-Gm-Message-State: APjAAAWEaJ2//7b45Apixo+P/Aflw8SyuzkRBgN/5ZSZ6Rv9nKLsP8cR Dc9uK5mmoxYvmYNUMdpfBg0=
X-Google-Smtp-Source: APXvYqxfEyFYp4NfTMoFXz6CKv26oyx/FPXb00vwBZtnohMPLMrBDEhOEAu6PPQxVN5ZRVld5+psRA==
X-Received: by 2002:adf:ee82:: with SMTP id b2mr3248034wro.185.1551283890969; Wed, 27 Feb 2019 08:11:30 -0800 (PST)
Received: from [172.25.3.212] (rrcs-67-52-140-5.west.biz.rr.com. [67.52.140.5]) by smtp.gmail.com with ESMTPSA id c186sm3578019wmf.34.2019.02.27.08.11.28 (version=TLS1_2 cipher=ECDHE-RSA-AES128-GCM-SHA256 bits=128/128); Wed, 27 Feb 2019 08:11:29 -0800 (PST)
Content-Type: text/plain; charset="utf-8"
Mime-Version: 1.0 (Mac OS X Mail 12.2 \(3445.102.3\))
From: Bob Hinden <bob.hinden@gmail.com>
In-Reply-To: <AA35BBA1-F3EB-4DA4-8161-265869886FD9@cooperw.in>
Date: Wed, 27 Feb 2019 08:11:24 -0800
Cc: Bob Hinden <bob.hinden@gmail.com>, IASA 2 WG <iasa20@ietf.org>
Content-Transfer-Encoding: quoted-printable
Message-Id: <61AC4384-1EBE-482D-95B0-3EB6B2CF3C2F@gmail.com>
References: <91A5EFAD-BD9F-435E-B01A-7091B263374D@cooperw.in> <967756CD-81E9-4F61-9153-C730C077A4F9@cooperw.in> <5A811FC8-4BC0-468C-9E16-9BBD093DED69@gmail.com> <AA35BBA1-F3EB-4DA4-8161-265869886FD9@cooperw.in>
To: Alissa Cooper <alissa@cooperw.in>
X-Mailer: Apple Mail (2.3445.102.3)
Archived-At: <https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/iasa20/30JO83n-tElGA_qbmCMn9W9MCd8>
Subject: Re: [Iasa20] AD review of draft-ietf-iasa2-rfc4071bis-04
X-BeenThere: iasa20@ietf.org
X-Mailman-Version: 2.1.29
Precedence: list
List-Id: Discussions relating to reorganising the IETF administrative structures in the so called “IASA 2.0” project. <iasa20.ietf.org>
List-Unsubscribe: <https://www.ietf.org/mailman/options/iasa20>, <mailto:iasa20-request@ietf.org?subject=unsubscribe>
List-Archive: <https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/browse/iasa20/>
List-Post: <mailto:iasa20@ietf.org>
List-Help: <mailto:iasa20-request@ietf.org?subject=help>
List-Subscribe: <https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/iasa20>, <mailto:iasa20-request@ietf.org?subject=subscribe>
X-List-Received-Date: Wed, 27 Feb 2019 16:11:35 -0000

Alissa,

> On Feb 27, 2019, at 12:06 AM, Alissa Cooper <alissa@cooperw.in> wrote:
> 
> Hi Bob,
> 
>> On Feb 27, 2019, at 1:13 AM, Bob Hinden <bob.hinden@gmail.com> wrote:
>> 
>> Alissa, Jason,
>> 
>> Could we get a diff of all of the changes?  
> 
> rfcdiff between -04 and -06 shows them all.

Thanks, a URL for this diff is:

https://tools.ietf.org/tools/rfcdiff/rfcdiff.pyht?url1=https://tools.ietf.org/id/draft-ietf-iasa2-rfc4071bis-04.txt&url2=https://tools.ietf.org/id/draft-ietf-iasa2-rfc4071bis-06.txt

Hopefully useful for others.  I will review it later today.

Bob


> 
> Alissa
> 
>> As you said, there are a lot of changes.
>> 
>> Thanks,
>> Bob
>> 
>> 
>>> On Feb 26, 2019, at 4:11 PM, Alissa Cooper <alissa@cooperw.in> wrote:
>>> 
>>> Thanks for the updates. I have just a few more edits to suggest. Since there were a lot of changes, I’ll give people in the WG a few days to review this and will issue the IETF LC next Monday unless there is ongoing discussion on the list at that point.
>>> 
>>> 
>>> = Please fix the I-D nits. =
>>> 
>>> = Section 4.1 =
>>> 
>>> "IASA: The IETF Administrative Support Activity, defined by [RFC4071] and updated by this document …”
>>> 
>>> I don’t think this is right since this document is obsoleting RFC 4071. I think you could say “The IETF Administrative Support Activity was originally defined in RFC 4071. As defined in this document, IASA consists of … .”Or just drop the first sentence of the definition altogether.
>>> 
>>> = Section 5.2 =
>>> 
>>> s/(or amending/(or amend/
>>> 
>>> = Section 7.5 =
>>> 
>>> s/other IETF staff/other IETF LLC staff/
>>> 
>>> s/and approval/with approval/
>>> 
>>> = Section 7.6 =
>>> 
>>> s/convey to donors/convey to sponsors and donors/
>>> 
>>> = Section 14.2 =
>>> 
>>> draft-ietf-iasa2-rfc7437bis needs to be normative, not informative
>>> 
>>> 
>>> 
>>> 
>>> _______________________________________________
>>> iasa20 mailing list
>>> iasa20@ietf.org
>>> https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/iasa20
>> 
>

v2.23.0 | Report a Bug | By Email