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Re: [Iasa20] AD review of draft-ietf-iasa2-rfc4071bis-04

Bob Hinden <bob.hinden@gmail.com> Wed, 27 February 2019 00:13 UTC

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Subject: Re: [Iasa20] AD review of draft-ietf-iasa2-rfc4071bis-04
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Alissa, Jason,

Could we get a diff of all of the changes?  As you said, there are a lot of changes.

Thanks,
Bob


> On Feb 26, 2019, at 4:11 PM, Alissa Cooper <alissa@cooperw.in> wrote:
> 
> Thanks for the updates. I have just a few more edits to suggest. Since there were a lot of changes, I’ll give people in the WG a few days to review this and will issue the IETF LC next Monday unless there is ongoing discussion on the list at that point.
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> = Please fix the I-D nits. =
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> = Section 4.1 =
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> "IASA: The IETF Administrative Support Activity, defined by [RFC4071] and updated by this document …”
> 
> I don’t think this is right since this document is obsoleting RFC 4071. I think you could say “The IETF Administrative Support Activity was originally defined in RFC 4071. As defined in this document, IASA consists of … .”Or just drop the first sentence of the definition altogether.
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> = Section 5.2 =
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> s/(or amending/(or amend/
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> = Section 7.5 =
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> s/other IETF staff/other IETF LLC staff/
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> s/and approval/with approval/
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> = Section 7.6 =
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> s/convey to donors/convey to sponsors and donors/
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> = Section 14.2 =
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> draft-ietf-iasa2-rfc7437bis needs to be normative, not informative
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