Re: [Iasa20] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-iasa2-rfc2031bis-05

Rob Sayre <sayrer@gmail.com> Fri, 23 August 2019 00:20 UTC

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From: Rob Sayre <sayrer@gmail.com>
Date: Thu, 22 Aug 2019 17:20:10 -0700
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Subject: Re: [Iasa20] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-iasa2-rfc2031bis-05
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There is a typo in section 3.

"(though ISOC employees may independently continue to make technical
  --> contributuins <-- as individuals)"

thanks,
Rob

On Thu, Aug 22, 2019 at 12:08 PM Livingood, Jason <
Jason_Livingood@comcast.com>; wrote:

> Thanks - all of that resolved in a -06 update to post shortly!
>
> Jason
>
> ´╗┐On 8/4/19, 1:38 PM, "Peter Yee via Datatracker" <noreply@ietf.org>; wrote:
>
>     Reviewer: Peter Yee
>     Review result: Ready with Nits
>
>     I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
>     Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed
>     by the IESG for the IETF Chair.  Please treat these comments just
>     like any other last call comments.
>
>     For more information, please see the FAQ at
>
>     <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>;.
>
>     Document: draft-ietf-iasa2-rfc2031bis-05
>     Reviewer: Peter Yee
>     Review Date: 2019-08-04
>     IETF LC End Date: 2019-08-05
>     IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat
>
>     Summary: This draft updates RFC 2031 (The IETF-ISOC Relationship) in
> light of
>     the IASA2 changes.  To the extent of that I've followed these changes,
> the
>     draft appears to capture my understanding of the current relationship,
> at least
>     as it is envisaged by the two parties.  Whether that's how things
> really
>     operate could probably be the subject of an extensive debate on the
> IETF
>     mailing list. ;-)  [Ready with nits]
>
>     Major issues:  None
>
>     Minor issues: None
>
>     Nits/editorial comments:
>
>     Page 3, last paragraph before section 2, first sentence: delete a
> redundant
>     "the".
>
>     Page 3, last paragraph before section 2, last sentence: remove the
> spaces in
>     "IETF - ISOC".
>
>     Page 5, section 6, first paragraph, first sentence: change "The" to
> "the".  As
>     far as I can tell the ISOC's official name is "Internet Society"
> without a
>     capitalized "The" and uses "the" when using the name in sentences.
>
>     Page 5, section 6, second paragraph, last sentence: change "board of
> trustees"
>     to "Board of Trustees" to match ISOC's usage.
>
>     Page 5, section 7, first paragraph, third sentence: change "board of
> trustees"
>     to "Board of Trustees".
>
>     Page 5, section 7, first paragraph, last sentence: change "arms
> length" to
>     "arm's length".
>
>
>
>