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Re: [Iasa20] AD review of draft-ietf-iasa2-rfc4071bis-04

Alissa Cooper <alissa@cooperw.in> Wed, 27 February 2019 00:11 UTC

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Subject: Re: [Iasa20] AD review of draft-ietf-iasa2-rfc4071bis-04
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Thanks for the updates. I have just a few more edits to suggest. Since there were a lot of changes, I’ll give people in the WG a few days to review this and will issue the IETF LC next Monday unless there is ongoing discussion on the list at that point.


= Please fix the I-D nits. =

= Section 4.1 =

"IASA: The IETF Administrative Support Activity, defined by [RFC4071] and updated by this document …”

I don’t think this is right since this document is obsoleting RFC 4071. I think you could say “The IETF Administrative Support Activity was originally defined in RFC 4071. As defined in this document, IASA consists of … .”Or just drop the first sentence of the definition altogether.

= Section 5.2 =

s/(or amending/(or amend/

= Section 7.5 =

s/other IETF staff/other IETF LLC staff/

s/and approval/with approval/

= Section 7.6 =

s/convey to donors/convey to sponsors and donors/

= Section 14.2 =

draft-ietf-iasa2-rfc7437bis needs to be normative, not informative

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