Re: [Iasa20] [EXTERNAL] Re: Genart last call review of draft-ietf-iasa2-rfc2031bis-05

["Livingood, Jason" <[e-mail]>]

Thanks – will fix that now!

From: Rob Sayre <[e-mail]>
Date: Thursday, August 22, 2019 at 8:20 PM
To: "Livingood, Jason" <[e-mail]>
Cc: Peter Yee <[e-mail]>, "[e-mail]" <[e-mail]>, "[e-mail]" <[e-mail]>, "[e-mail]" <[e-mail]>, "[e-mail]" <[e-mail]>
Subject: [EXTERNAL] Re: Genart last call review of draft-ietf-iasa2-rfc2031bis-05

There is a typo in section 3.

"(though ISOC employees may independently continue to make technical
  --> contributuins <-- as individuals)"

thanks,
Rob

On Thu, Aug 22, 2019 at 12:08 PM Livingood, Jason <[e-mail]<mailto:[e-mail]>> wrote:
Thanks - all of that resolved in a -06 update to post shortly!

Jason

On 8/4/19, 1:38 PM, "Peter Yee via Datatracker" <[e-mail]<mailto:[e-mail]>> wrote:

    Reviewer: Peter Yee
    Review result: Ready with Nits

    I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
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    Document: draft-ietf-iasa2-rfc2031bis-05
    Reviewer: Peter Yee
    Review Date: 2019-08-04
    IETF LC End Date: 2019-08-05
    IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

    Summary: This draft updates RFC 2031 (The IETF-ISOC Relationship) in light of
    the IASA2 changes.  To the extent of that I've followed these changes, the
    draft appears to capture my understanding of the current relationship, at least
    as it is envisaged by the two parties.  Whether that's how things really
    operate could probably be the subject of an extensive debate on the IETF
    mailing list. ;-)  [Ready with nits]

    Major issues:  None

    Minor issues: None

    Nits/editorial comments:

    Page 3, last paragraph before section 2, first sentence: delete a redundant
    "the".

    Page 3, last paragraph before section 2, last sentence: remove the spaces in
    "IETF - ISOC".

    Page 5, section 6, first paragraph, first sentence: change "The" to "the".  As
    far as I can tell the ISOC's official name is "Internet Society" without a
    capitalized "The" and uses "the" when using the name in sentences.

    Page 5, section 6, second paragraph, last sentence: change "board of trustees"
    to "Board of Trustees" to match ISOC's usage.

    Page 5, section 7, first paragraph, third sentence: change "board of trustees"
    to "Board of Trustees".

    Page 5, section 7, first paragraph, last sentence: change "arms length" to
    "arm's length".