[Iasa20] Benjamin Kaduk's No Objection on draft-ietf-iasa2-rfc4071bis-09: (with COMMENT)

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Four paragraphs is fairly long for an Abstract.

Section 1

                                                           Under this
   structure, the Internet Administrative Oversight Committee (IAOC) is
   eliminated, and its oversight and advising functions transferred to
   the IETF LLC Board.

(I note that the Abstract uses the past tense "was eliminated", and also
differs about whether the 'I' is "Internet" or "IETF".)
Are we comfortable tossing out the concept of the IAOC with no lead-up
or reference?

Section 2

It's great to say that no changes are made, but that doesn't help
someone looking for the current procedures if we don't provide a
reference to what the current procedures are.

Section 4.2

   o  The Board of Directors of the IETF LLC - formally a multi-member
      "manager" of the IETF LLC on behalf of ISOC - assumes the
      oversight responsibilities of the IAOC.

I'm not sure whether there's any ambiguity about whether "of" means
"over" or "from", to a reader who doesn't already know that it means
"from".

Section 6.2

   As noted above, a maximum of two Directors may be appointed by the
   IETF LLC Board.  They can obviously choose to appoint none, one, or
   two.  These appointments need not be on an exceptional basis, but
   rather be routine, and may occur at any time of the year since it is
   on an as-needed basis.

nit: I think there's a word missing here, maybe in "can rather be routine".
There also seems to be a singular/plural mismatch between "these" and
"it".

   The appointment of a Board-appointed Director requires a two-thirds
   majority vote of the Directors then in office, and the appointee
   shall take office immediately upon appointment.  [...]

Upon appointment, or upon appointment *and confirmation*?

   The Board may decide on a case-by-case basis how long each term shall
   be, factoring in the restriction for consecutive terms in
   Section 6.4.

Section 6.5 also seems relevant.

Section 6.10

                                     If a quorum is not present at any
   meeting of the Board, the Directors present may adjourn the meeting
   from time to time, without notice other than announcement at the
   meeting, until a quorum is present.  [...]

I'm not sure I understand the purpose of "from time to time" in this
sentence.  (Barry seems to have covered this already, though.)

Section 7.7

   The IETF LLC exists to support the IETF, IAB, and IRTF.  Therefore,
   the IETF LLC's funding and all revenues, in-kind contributions, and
   other income that comprise that funding shall be used solely to
   support activities related to the IETF, IAB, IRTF, and RFC Editor,
   and for no other purposes.

Why are the lists in the first and second sentences different?