[Idr] Shpehrd of draft-ietf-idr-rfc8203bis-04.txt
"Susan Hares" <shares@ndzh.com> Thu, 12 September 2019 07:02 UTC
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Subject: [Idr] Shpehrd of draft-ietf-idr-rfc8203bis-04.txt
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Job, Jacob, John, Alex: I have reviewed draft-ietf-ider-rfc8203bis-04.txt in preparation For sending this document to the IESG for publication. I've included my comments in two forms: Required Changes and Editorial suggestions. I've asked for OPS-DIR and RTG-DIR early review of this draft. Please consider submitting the required text changes in a -05.txt version so the early reviews can move swiftly. Susan Hares -------------------- Shepherd's Required Changes prior to submission: IN section: 5. IANA Considerations Old: /Cease Notification message subcodes/ New: /BGP Cease NOTIFICATION message subcodes/ Why: registry name at: https://www.iana.org/assignments/bgp-parameters/bgp-parameters.xhtml#bgp-par ameters-83 is incorrectly provided in the text. Shepherd's Editorial suggestion: Location: Page 3: Section 6 Security considerations Paragraph 3, last sentence Text:/ Refer to the related considerations in [RFC4271 <https://tools.ietf.org/html/rfc4271> ] and [RFC4272 <https://tools.ietf.org/html/rfc4272> ]./ I understand why you point to [RFC4272], but what related considerations are you examining in [RFC4271]. I suggest adding a section in [RFC4271] that you wish to refer to. The form could be New text:/ Refer to the related considerations in [RFC4271 <https://tools.ietf.org/html/rfc4271> ] (section x.x) and [RFC4272 <https://tools.ietf.org/html/rfc4272> ]./