Review of draft-ietf-ecrit-car-crash-20

Dan Romascanu <dromasca@gmail.com> Thu, 05 January 2017 11:13 UTC

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Reviewer: Dan Romascanu
Review result: Almost Ready

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Document: draft-ietf-ecrit-car-crash-20
Reviewer: Dan Romascanu
Review Date: 2017-01-05
IETF LC End Date: 2017-01-06
IESG Telechat date: 2017-01-19

Summary:

It's a good and useful document which needs to be read and understood
together with the eCall document, and other relevant documents from
EC, NENA, APCOT. There is at least one major issue that deserves
discussion and clarification before approval, IMO. 

Major issues:

1. One aspect of the relationship with eCall is unclear to me. 

The Abstract says: 

>  This document is an extension
   of the eCall document, with the primary differences being that
this
   document makes the MSD data set optional and VEDS mandatory, and
adds
   attribute values to the metadata/control object to permit greater
   functionality. 

Then in the Introduction: 

> This document reuses the technical aspects of next-generation pan-
   European eCall (a mandated and standardized system for emergency
   calls by in-vehicle systems within Europe), as described in
   [I-D.ietf-ecrit-ecall].  However, this document specifies a
different
   set of vehicle (crash) data, specifically, the Vehicle Emergency
Data
   Set (VEDS) rather than the eCall Minimum Set of Data (MSD). 

and in Section 9: 

>  This document extends [I-D.ietf-ecrit-ecall] by reusing the call
set-
   up and other normative requirements with the exception that in
this
   document, support for the eCall MSD is OPTIONAL and support for
VEDS
   in REQUIRED. 

First of all it's not clear if by 'eCall document' what it's meant is
the European document or draft-ietf-ecrit-ecall. Second it's not clear
how the two IETF documents, both on standards track relate, when the
status of the MSD and VEDS data sets are different. What would
prevail? The IESG is asked to approve two document, both on standards
track, with different and in this case contradictory content. If I am
a car manufacturer, I would ask myself what support will be mandatory
to implement? Or maybe there are different scenarios where the
different data sets are recommended? But then should not support for
both be mandatory to implement and optional to use, maybe per
geographical area? After all vehicles cross borders, or are
transported / exported over the seas nowadays. 

Minor issues:

1. In the Abstract: 

> ... this document specifies a different set of vehicle (crash)
   data, specifically, the Vehicle Emergency Data Set (VEDS) ...

Actually VEDS is not specified in this document, but by APCO and NENA
and referred by this document. 

2. In section 4: 

>  In the paired model, the IVS uses a Bluetooth link with a
previously-
   paired handset to establish an emergency call

Is Bluetooth only an example, or only one standard way of establishing
a paired communication in the legacy example? I suspect the later - so
I suggest that the text is reformulated in this manner.

3. I am not an expert in this area but I wonder whether the initial
values of the registry in 14.6 are aligned with car manufacturers
standards. For example I am wondering if lamps that change colors
should not be also included. 

4. I am not an expert in this area but I wonder whether the initial
values of the registry in 14.7 are aligned with car manufacturers
standards. For example I am wondering why night-vision capability is
provided only for the front cameras. 


Nits/editorial comments: 

1. I believe that the European eCall requirements documents 16062 and
16072 need to be Informative References. 

2. Add an informative reference for Bluetooth mentioned in Section 4.

3. Section 16 needs to be removed at publication.