RE: Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-ccamp-rfc5787bis-05
"Roni Even" <ron.even.tlv@gmail.com> Wed, 17 October 2012 10:03 UTC
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From: Roni Even <ron.even.tlv@gmail.com>
To: "'Malis, Andrew G (Andy)'" <andrew.g.malis@verizon.com>, draft-ietf-ccamp-rfc5787bis.all@tools.ietf.org
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Subject: RE: Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-ccamp-rfc5787bis-05
Date: Wed, 17 Oct 2012 12:01:03 +0200
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Andy, Thanks Roni From: Malis, Andrew G (Andy) [mailto:andrew.g.malis@verizon.com] Sent: 09 October, 2012 2:55 AM To: Roni Even; draft-ietf-ccamp-rfc5787bis.all@tools.ietf.org Cc: ietf@ietf.org; gen-art@ietf.org; Malis, Andrew G (Andy) Subject: Re: Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-ccamp-rfc5787bis-05 Roni, Thanks for your review, and sorry for the delay on the response, but we've also been working on incorporating other changes to the draft as well. To answer your question on section 6.1, that was a good catch. That should have said "other than the first", rather than "preceding the first". This will be corrected. To answer your question on section 10, the text is repeated in the subsections to make life easier for IANA, since they would probably have replicated it themselves anyway in the three registry listings. On your last comment, we agree with you that the more familiar reader will not have a problem. Thanks again, Andy From: Roni Even <ron.even.tlv@gmail.com> Date: Monday, August 13, 2012 14:07 To: "draft-ietf-ccamp-rfc5787bis.all@tools.ietf.org" <draft-ietf-ccamp-rfc5787bis.all@tools.ietf.org> Cc: "ietf@ietf.org" <ietf@ietf.org>, "gen-art@ietf.org" <gen-art@ietf.org> Subject: Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-ccamp-rfc5787bis-05 Resent-To: <acee.lindem@ericsson.com>, Adrian Farrell <adrian@olddog.co.uk>, Andrew Malis <andrew.g.malis@verizon.com>, <dbrungard@att.com>, <dimitri.papadimitriou@alcatel-lucent.com>, <lberger@labn.net> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-ccamp-rfc5787bis-05. Reviewer: Roni Even Review Date:2012-8-12 IETF LC End Date: 2012-8-17 IESG Telechat date: Summary: This draft is almost ready for publication as a standard track RFC. Major issues: Minor issues: In section 6.1 " If specified more than once, instances preceding the first will be ignored and condition SHOULD be logged for possible action by the network operator." I am not sure what is meant by preceding the first. Nits/editorial comments: 1. The following note appears in section 10.1, 10.2 and 10.3. "Note that the same values for the Inter-RA Export Upward sub-TLV and the Inter-RA Export Downward Sub-TLV MUST be used when they appear in the Link TLV, Node Attribute TLV, and Router Address TLV." - why not have it in section 10 before section 10.1. 2. I saw in appendix B that one of the changes from RFC 5787 was to clarify the terminology before defining extensions, I would have found it easier to read if the ASON hierarchy and the relation to OSPF in section 2 were presented in figures. This was more an issue to me as a reader not familiar with the terminology and I would like to think that the more familiar reader will not have problem.
- Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-ccamp-rfc5787bis-… Roni Even
- RE: Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-ccamp-rfc5787… Adrian Farrel
- RE: Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-ccamp-rfc5787… Roni Even
- Re: Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-ccamp-rfc5787… Malis, Andrew G (Andy)
- RE: Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-ccamp-rfc5787… Roni Even