Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-cdni-control-triggers-11
"Roni Even" <ron.even.tlv@gmail.com> Mon, 21 December 2015 12:11 UTC
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Subject: Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-cdni-control-triggers-11
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-cdni-control-triggers-11 Reviewer: Roni Even Review Date:2015-12-21 IETF LC End Date: 2015-12-21 IESG Telechat date: Summary: This draft is ready for publication as a standard track RFC. Major issues: Minor issues: Nits/editorial comments: 1. I think that having a state diagram in section 4 can help, this is an editorial comment