RE: [Teas] Genart telechat review of draft-ietf-teas-pce-central-control-04

Hi, Adrian.
OK, it's a fair cop.
Cheers,Elwyn

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-------- Original message --------From: Adrian Farrel <adrian@olddog.co.uk> Date: 04/09/2017  17:59  (GMT+00:00) To: 'Elwyn Davies' <elwynd@dial.pipex.com>, gen-art@ietf.org Cc: draft-ietf-teas-pce-central-control.all@ietf.org, ietf@ietf.org, teas@ietf.org Subject: RE: [Teas] Genart telechat review of draft-ietf-teas-pce-central-control-04 
Hi Elwyn, -04 has   Some of this will be the TED as is normal for a PCE and can be   collected using the mechanisms already in place (such as listening to   the IGPs, using BGP-LS [RFC7752], or northbound export of YANG-   encoded data [I-D.ietf-teas-yang-te-topo]).-05 has   Some of this will be the TED as is normal for a PCE and can be   collected using the mechanisms already in place (such as listening to   the IGPs, using BGP-LS [RFC7752], or northbound export of YANG-   encoded data [I-D.ietf-teas-yang-te-topo] from the network elements   to the controller). I think that probably gives enough context. Yes, thanks for the typo in 2.1.2. I'll save it for Auth48. A From: Elwyn Davies [mailto:elwynd@dial.pipex.com] 
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Subject: RE: [Teas] Genart telechat review of draft-ietf-teas-pce-central-control-04  Hi, Adrian. Two points:- I don't see an explanation of northbound in -05.- In the new text at the end of s2.1.2 s/whole the controllers/while the controllers/ Otherwise, the extra text and changes look helpful. Best wshes,Elwyn  Sent from Samsung tablet. -------- Original message --------From: Adrian Farrel <adrian@olddog.co.uk> Date: 04/09/2017 10:47 (GMT+00:00) To: 'Elwyn Davies' <elwynd@dial.pipex.com>, gen-art@ietf.org Cc: draft-ietf-teas-pce-central-control.all@ietf.org, ietf@ietf.org, teas@ietf.org Subject: RE: [Teas] Genart telechat review of draft-ietf-teas-pce-central-control-04  Thanks Elwyn,

Clarified in the next revision.

Adrian

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> Subject: [Teas] Genart telechat review of
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> Reviewer: Elwyn Davies
> Review result: Ready with Nits
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> Document: draft-ietf-teas-pce-central-control-04
> Reviewer: Elwyn Davies
> Review Date: 2017-08-28
> IETF LC End Date: 2017-08-24
> IESG Telechat date: 2017-08-31
> 
> Summary: Thanks for addressing my Last Call comments on -03.  The new version
> is ready with one introduced nit.  Also I am still of the abstract is somewhat
> overlong.
> 
> Nit:
> s6, para 2: The SDN term 'northbound' has appeared in the new version. Needs
> brief explanation.
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