RE: Genart last call review of draft-ietf-detnet-problem-statement-07

"Pascal Thubert (pthubert)" <pthubert@cisco.com> Fri, 26 October 2018 13:48 UTC

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From: "Pascal Thubert (pthubert)" <pthubert@cisco.com>
To: Matthew Miller <linuxwolf+ietf@outer-planes.net>, "gen-art@ietf.org" <gen-art@ietf.org>
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Subject: RE: Genart last call review of draft-ietf-detnet-problem-statement-07
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Many thanks, Matthew.

This will be fixed in the next update of the draft, already fixed in bitbucket.

Take care,

Pascal

> -----Original Message-----
> From: Matthew Miller <linuxwolf+ietf@outer-planes.net>;
> Sent: jeudi 25 octobre 2018 20:02
> To: gen-art@ietf.org
> Cc: detnet@ietf.org; ietf@ietf.org; draft-ietf-detnet-problem-
> statement.all@ietf.org
> Subject: Genart last call review of draft-ietf-detnet-problem-statement-07
> 
> Reviewer: Matthew Miller
> Review result: Ready with Nits
> 
> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review
> Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for
> the IETF Chair.  Please treat these comments just like any other last call
> comments.
> 
> For more information, please see the FAQ at
> 
> <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>;.
> 
> Document:
> Reviewer: Matthew A. Miller
> Review Date: 2018-10-25
> IETF LC End Date: 2018-10-03
> IESG Telechat date: N/A
> 
> Summary:
> 
> Ready to publish as an Informational Draft, though there are nits that ought to
> be addressed before publication.
> 
> Major issues:  NONE
> 
> Minor issues:  NONE
> 
> Nits/editorial comments:
> 
> * In Section 3.1. "Supported topologies" paragraph 2, the word "an"
> should be "an" in the phrase "a tunnel between and ingress and an egress
> router".
> 
> * In Section 3.1. "Supported topologies" paragraph 2, the word "of"
> should be "or" in the phrase "... the path is end-to-end of a tunnel.".
>