Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-ccamp-rfc5787bis-05

["Roni Even" <[e-mail]>]

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Document: draft-ietf-ccamp-rfc5787bis-05.

Reviewer: Roni Even

Review Date:2012-8-12

IETF LC End Date: 2012-8-17

IESG Telechat date:

 

Summary: This draft is almost ready for publication as a standard track RFC.

 

 

Major issues:

 

Minor issues:

In section 6.1 " If specified more than once, instances preceding the first
will be ignored and condition SHOULD be logged for possible action by the
network operator."  I am not sure what is meant by preceding the first.

 

 

Nits/editorial comments:

 

1.	The following note appears in section 10.1, 10.2 and 10.3. "Note
that the same values for the Inter-RA Export Upward sub-TLV and the Inter-RA
Export Downward Sub-TLV MUST be used when they appear in the Link TLV, Node
Attribute TLV, and Router Address TLV." - why not have it in section 10
before section 10.1.
2.	I saw in appendix  B that one of the changes from RFC 5787 was to
clarify the terminology before defining extensions, I would have found it
easier to read if the ASON hierarchy and the relation to OSPF in section 2
were presented in figures. This was more an issue to me as a reader not
familiar with the terminology and I would like to think that the more
familiar reader will not have problem.