Review of draft-bradner-rfc3979bis-11

Brian Carpenter <brian.e.carpenter@gmail.com> Thu, 26 January 2017 00:48 UTC

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Reviewer: Brian Carpenter
Review result: Ready with Nits

Gen-ART Last CAll review of draft-bradner-rfc3979bis-11.txt

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Document: draft-bradner-rfc3979bis-11.txt
Reviewer: Brian Carpenter
Review Date: 2017-01-26
IETF LC End Date: 2017-02-15 
IESG Telechat date:  

Summary: Ready with nits
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Comment:
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I've been tracking this draft since the start and I'm very supportive
of it.
I have reviewed the changes since my previous review of -08, and I am
happy
them. I have made some comments on issues raised by other reviwers,
but as
one of them said perfection is impossible.

Nits:
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> 7. Evaluating Alternative Technologies in IETF Working Groups
...
> technology in violation if this principle if there is a very good

s/if this principle/of this principle/

> 13. Changes Since RFC 3979 and RFC 4879
> 16. Changes Since RFC 3979

Should the preamble to these sections state that they are provided
for informational purposes only and that in case of doubt the text 
of sections 1-12 prevails?

Should these two sections be merged?