Genart last call review of draft-ietf-rtgwg-yang-key-chain-17

Matthew Miller <linuxwolf+ietf@outer-planes.net> Fri, 07 April 2017 17:58 UTC

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Reviewer: Matthew Miller
Review result: Almost Ready

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Document: draft-ietf-rtgwg-yang-key-chain-17
Reviewer: Matthew A. Miller
Review Date: 2017-04-07
IETF LC End Date: 2017-04-07
IESG Telechat date: 2017-04-13

Summary:

This document is almost ready to be published as a Proposed Standard,
once the issues noted herein are resolved.

Major issues:

NONE

Minor issues:

* Forgive me for my limited knowledge of YANG, but is there a reason
key-strings are only representable as either a YANG string or
hex-string type, and not the YANG binary type?

* This document does not provide much guidance around AES key wrap
other than it can be used and the KEK is provided
out-of-band/-context.
For instance, AES key-wrapped key-strings probably require using
"hexidecimal-string".  Also, assuming I'm reading the model
correctly,
it appears this feature applies to the whole chain, which I think is
worth calling out.

* This document warns against using the "clear-text" algorithm, which
the
reader is lead to understand is for legacy implementation reasons.
However, is there not a similar concern with cryptographically weak
algorithms, such as md5 and (arguably) sha1?

Nits/editorial comments:

* In Section 3.2. "Key Chain Model Features", the word "of" is
missing
between "configuration" and "an" in the phrase "support configuration
an
acceptance tolerance".

Non-nits:

* I note that idnits is calling out some odd spacing issues, but I
think
they are safe to ignore.