RE: [Teas] Genart telechat review of draft-ietf-teas-pce-central-control-04

"Adrian Farrel" <adrian@olddog.co.uk> Mon, 04 September 2017 16:59 UTC

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From: Adrian Farrel <adrian@olddog.co.uk>
To: 'Elwyn Davies' <elwynd@dial.pipex.com>, gen-art@ietf.org
Cc: draft-ietf-teas-pce-central-control.all@ietf.org, ietf@ietf.org, teas@ietf.org
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Subject: RE: [Teas] Genart telechat review of draft-ietf-teas-pce-central-control-04
Date: Mon, 04 Sep 2017 17:59:00 +0100
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Hi Elwyn,
 
-04 has
   Some of this will be the TED as is normal for a PCE and can be
  collected using the mechanisms already in place (such as listening to
   the IGPs, using BGP-LS [RFC7752], or northbound export of YANG-
   encoded data [I-D.ietf-teas-yang-te-topo]).
-05 has
   Some of this will be the TED as is normal for a PCE and can be
   collected using the mechanisms already in place (such as listening to
   the IGPs, using BGP-LS [RFC7752], or northbound export of YANG-
   encoded data [I-D.ietf-teas-yang-te-topo] from the network elements
   to the controller).
 
I think that probably gives enough context.
 
Yes, thanks for the typo in 2.1.2. I'll save it for Auth48.
 
A
 
From: Elwyn Davies [mailto:elwynd@dial.pipex.com] 
Sent: 04 September 2017 14:46
To: adrian@olddog.co.uk; gen-art@ietf.org
Cc: draft-ietf-teas-pce-central-control.all@ietf.org; ietf@ietf.org; teas@ietf.org
Subject: RE: [Teas] Genart telechat review of draft-ietf-teas-pce-central-control-04
 
 
Hi, Adrian.
 
Two points:
- I don't see an explanation of northbound in -05.
- In the new text at the end of s2.1.2 s/whole the controllers/while the controllers/
 
Otherwise, the extra text and changes look helpful.
 
Best wshes,
Elwyn
 
 
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From: Adrian Farrel <adrian@olddog.co.uk> 
Date: 04/09/2017 10:47 (GMT+00:00) 
To: 'Elwyn Davies' <elwynd@dial.pipex.com>, gen-art@ietf.org 
Cc: draft-ietf-teas-pce-central-control.all@ietf.org, ietf@ietf.org, teas@ietf.org 
Subject: RE: [Teas] Genart telechat review of draft-ietf-teas-pce-central-control-04 
 
Thanks Elwyn,

Clarified in the next revision.

Adrian

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> Subject: [Teas] Genart telechat review of
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> Reviewer: Elwyn Davies
> Review result: Ready with Nits
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> Document: draft-ietf-teas-pce-central-control-04
> Reviewer: Elwyn Davies
> Review Date: 2017-08-28
> IETF LC End Date: 2017-08-24
> IESG Telechat date: 2017-08-31
> 
> Summary: Thanks for addressing my Last Call comments on -03.  The new version
> is ready with one introduced nit.  Also I am still of the abstract is somewhat
> overlong.
> 
> Nit:
> s6, para 2: The SDN term 'northbound' has appeared in the new version. Needs
> brief explanation.
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