RE: Last Call: <draft-freytag-lager-variant-rules-02.txt> (Variant Rules) to Informational RFC

"Hollenbeck, Scott" <shollenbeck@verisign.com> Tue, 24 January 2017 15:08 UTC

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Subject: RE: Last Call: <draft-freytag-lager-variant-rules-02.txt> (Variant Rules) to Informational RFC
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From: "Hollenbeck, Scott" <shollenbeck@verisign.com>
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I am the shepherd for this document. I'd like to share my review comments here. Please note that the document has been updated to version -03 since the last call announcement was sent and I am reviewing the -03 version.

The title of the document is "Variant Rules". It might be helpful to add a few words to very clearly identify what these rules are for. Perhaps something like "Domain Name Variant Label Generation Rules"?

In the abstract, it would be helpful to add a few words to clearly note that "labels" refers to domain names.

OLD:
This document gives guidance on designing well-behaved Label Generation Rulesets (LGRs) that support variant labels.

NEW:
This document gives guidance on designing well-behaved Label Generation Rulesets (LGRs) that support variant labels for domain names.

Section 1:

The first paragraph uses the "LGR" acronym for "Label Generation Rulesets"; the Abstract uses "LGRs". Please use one or the other consistently throughout the document, at least in places where the acronym is expanded.

"When it comes time to capture the LGR in a formal definition, the notation used in this document can be converted to the XML format fairly directly."

Please add a forward reference to Section 16.

NEW (just a suggestion):
"When it comes time to capture the LGR in a formal definition, the notation used in this document can be converted to the XML format fairly directly as described in Section 16 [XMLNotation]."

These are all minor issues. Please hold off on making document edits until others have had a chance to share their comments.

Scott