Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-nfsv4-federated-fs-protocol-14

"Peter Yee" <peter@akayla.com> Thu, 29 November 2012 23:08 UTC

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Document: draft-ietf-nfsv4-federated-fs-protocol-14
Reviewer: Peter Yee
Review Date: Nov-29-2012
IETF LC End Date: Oct-22-2012
IESG Telechat date: Nov-29-2012

Summary: This draft is basically ready for publication, but has a nit that
should be fixed before publication. [Ready with nits.]

All other corrections from the -13 review were accepted and the other
changes in the current version appear reasonable.

Major issues:

Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments:

Section 4.2.1.8, 1st paragraph, 2nd sentence: bracket "Section 2.8.1"  in
"(see" and ")" for readability.
[This is my same suggestion from the previous review.  I won't mention it
again, I promise. :-) ]