Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-dnsop-dnssec-dps-framework-08
"Peter Yee" <peter@akayla.com> Sun, 15 July 2012 01:01 UTC
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From: Peter Yee <peter@akayla.com>
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Subject: Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-dnsop-dnssec-dps-framework-08
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. This draft is ready for publication as an Informational RFC. Document: draft-ietf-dnsop-dnssec-dps-framework-08 Reviewer: Peter Yee Review Date: 14-July-2012 IETF LC End Date: 17-July-2012 IESG Telechat date: Pending Summary: This draft provides a framework for the creation of DNSSEC Policies and Practice Statements. Major Issues: None Minor Issues: Section 4.4.5 discusses how to handle key compromise. It might be useful to discuss here or somewhere else in the document how the compromise is prevented from recurring if there were no attenuating measures in place beforehand. That might well lead to a revision of the DP or DPS. The draft doesn't really discuss under what circumstances a document should be iterated or amended. Of course, that might be considered a meta issue and outside of the scope of the DP or DPS proper. Nits/editorial comments: In Section 4.6, "behaviour" is spelt in the British manner. While most assuredly not incorrect, you may wish to spell it in the American manner. Serial commas are used inconsistently. Nothing as egregious as the following example, however. ;-) http://grammarnowtips.wordpress.com/2011/01/08/a-case-for-the-serial-comma/
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-dnsop-… Russ Housley
- Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-dnsop-dnssec-dps-fra… Peter Yee
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-dnsop-… Joe Abley
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-dnsop-… Russ Housley
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-dnsop-… Joe Abley
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-dnsop-… Russ Housley
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-dnsop-… Stephen Kent
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-dnsop-… Joe Abley
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-dnsop-… Anne-Marie Eklund-Löwinder
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-dnsop-… Fredrik Ljunggren