Re: Gen-ART IETF Last Call review for draft-ietf-stox-7248bis-12
Peter Saint-Andre - Filament <peter@filament.com> Thu, 27 October 2016 02:12 UTC
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Subject: Re: Gen-ART IETF Last Call review for draft-ietf-stox-7248bis-12
To: Ralph Droms <rdroms.ietf@gmail.com>, "Review Area gen-art@ietf.org Team" <gen-art@ietf.org>
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From: Peter Saint-Andre - Filament <peter@filament.com>
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Hi Ralph, thanks for the review. Comments inline. On 10/21/16 2:52 PM, Ralph Droms wrote: > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for draft-ietf-stox-7248bis-12. The > General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being > processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments > just like any other last call comments. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > > <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Document: draft-ietf-stox-7248bis-12 > Reviewer: Ralph Droms > Review Date: 2016-10-21 > IETF LC End Date: 2016-10-06 > IESG Telechat date: 2016-11-03 > > Summary: Ready for publication as a Proposed Standard > > I apologize for the late submission of this review. > > I am not well-versed in either SIP or XMPP, so I could only give the > technical content of the document a cursory review. I found no > issues to report in that review. > > I'll make two small editorial suggestions: > > 1) There are possibly anachronistic references to "this series" of > documents. The members of that "series" will be less obvious with the > publication of rfc7248bis. It would likely be helpful to list the > members of the document series explicitly. Good point, will fix before publication. > 2) It might be useful to add a short section on the history of the > document, to give readers of this document an understanding of the > motivation for the publication of 7248bis. That oversight was noted by another reviewer, so the relevant section was added in version -13 (you might have reviewed -12): https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-stox-7248bis-13#appendix-A Thanks! Peter
- Gen-ART IETF Last Call review for draft-ietf-stox… Ralph Droms
- Re: Gen-ART IETF Last Call review for draft-ietf-… Peter Saint-Andre - Filament