Re: [IPsec] John Scudder's No Objection on draft-ietf-ipsecme-ikev2-intermediate-09: (with COMMENT)

[Valery Smyslov <[e-mail]>]

Hi John,

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> Thanks for this. I have just a couple minor questions/suggestions.
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> 1. Section 3.2, “these exchanges MUST follow each other”. I suppose what is
> meant is, “these exchanges MUST be sequential” (this hardly seems to need to be
> mandated, but OK). Or is something else intended, in which case, what is it?

No, you got the point. If you think “these exchanges MUST be sequential”
is more natural English wording, I'll use it. As a non-native speaker 
I probably don't feel the difference...

> 2. In Section 3.4, there is:
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>    not all error notifications may ever appear in the IKE_INTERMEDIATE
>    exchange (for example, errors concerning authentication are generally
>    only applicable to the IKE_AUTH exchange).
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> I can’t make sense of what the word “ever” is doing there. It makes sense to me
> if I remove “ever” to make it “not all error notifications may appear”. It’s OK
> if I change “ever” to “even”. But I don’t get it, as written. Am I missing
> something, or would one of my edits be appropriate?

This is again an artefact of me being a non-native speaker.
By using this word I intended to stress that some error notifications
may _never_ appear in the IKE_INTERMEDIATE, but it's OK for me to drop this word.

Thank you!

Regards,
Valery.