[IPsec] Barry Leiba's No Objection on draft-ietf-ipsecme-qr-ikev2-10: (with COMMENT)

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COMMENT:
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Yes, an interesting document, and thanks for that.  A few editorial comments:

— Section 1 —

   to be quantum resistant, that is, invulnerable to an attacker with a
   quantum computer.

“Invulnerable” isn’t the same as “not vulnerable”: it has a stronger
connotation.  You should probably use “not vulnerable” or “resistant” instead.

   By bringing post-
   quantum security to IKEv2, this note removes the need to use

Make it “this document”, please.

   This document does not replace the
   authentication checks that the protocol does; instead, it is done as
   a parallel check.

What’s the antecedent to “it”?  Should “it is” instead be “they are”?

— Section 3 —

   when the initiator believes it has a mandatory to use PPK

You need hyphens in “mandatory-to-use”.

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I also find it interesting that Alexey thought you needed to add a normative
reference for “ASCII”, bit not for “base64”.  Personally, I think both are
sufficiently well known that you need neither.