Barry Leiba's No Objection on draft-ietf-6man-ra-pref64-08: (with COMMENT)

[Barry Leiba via Datatracker <[e-mail]>]

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draft-ietf-6man-ra-pref64-08: No Objection

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COMMENT:
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I just have a couple of editorial comments about Section 4:

   If the network operator desires to route different
   parts of the IPv4 address space to different NAT64 devices, this can
   be accomplished by routing more specifics of the NAT64 prefix to
   those devices.

What does “more specifics” mean here?  I don’t understand the sentence.

   For example, if the operator is using the RFC1918
   address space, e.g. 10.0.0.0/8 internally and would like to route
   10.0.0.0/8 through NAT64 device A and the rest of the IPv4 space
   through NAT64 device B, and the operator's NAT64 prefix is
   2001:db8:a:b::/96, then the operator can route
   2001:db8:a:b::a00:0/104 to NAT64 A and 2001:db8:a:b::/96 to NAT64 B.

This sentence is too long and cumbersome, and would benefit from being split
(which would also fix some awkward missing commas).  How’s this?:

NEW
   For example, suppose an operator is using the RFC1918 address
   space 10.0.0.0/8 internally.  That operator might want to route
   10.0.0.0/8 through NAT64 device A, and the rest of the IPv4 space
   through NAT64 device B.  If the operator's NAT64 prefix is
   2001:db8:a:b::/96, then the operator can route
   2001:db8:a:b::a00:0/104 to NAT64 A and 2001:db8:a:b::/96 to NAT64 B.
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