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Re: [ipwave] I-D Action: draft-ietf-ipwave-vehicular-networking-14.txt

Alexandre Petrescu <alexandre.petrescu@gmail.com> Thu, 12 March 2020 12:13 UTC

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Le 12/03/2020 à 05:26, Z.W. Yan a écrit :
[...]
> 7) In Subsection 4.1, the PMIPv6 is mentioned but it is very
> unexpected and sudden. It’s better if the elements in Figure 1 can be
> explained first, and then the related communications can be explained
> and at last the adopted and extended protocols involved (such as OCB
> and PMIP) can be explained.

I tend to agree with the suggestion.

In addition, I would like to suggest to also use the term "Internet" in 
the figure.  Maybe paste "Internet" on the cloud, or similar.

(I also value the other comments in this review, that I deleted here, 
but are present in the original review).

Alex

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