[kitten] Ben Campbell's No Objection on draft-ietf-kitten-sasl-oauth-22: (with COMMENT)

["Ben Campbell" <[e-mail]>]

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draft-ietf-kitten-sasl-oauth-22: No Objection

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COMMENT:
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-- section 1, description of step A:

if the preferred way is different than the diagram, why not show it the
preferred way in the diagram in the first place?

-- 1, 2nd to last paragraph

The "SHOULD" means the reference to I-D.ietf-oauth-dyn-reg needs to be be
normative.

-- 3: "Such a new SASL OAuth mechanism can be added by simply
   registering the new name(s)"

Register them where?

-- 3.2, 2nd paragraph : "... known to the application."

Known to the "resource server"?

Editorial Stuff:

-- 3.1, "Port":

I assume that means the destination port to which the client connected?
(similar to Host?)

-- 3.1.1 "Post": default value is "". 

Does "" represent an empty string?

-- 3.2, first sentence"

s/" ... according the specification..." / "... according to the
specification..."

- 5: "Lifetime of the appliation sessions"

s/appliation/application

"It is possible that SASL will be authenticating..."

s/"... be authenticating..." / "... be used to authenticate..."