[kitten] Gen-art LC review: draft-ietf-kitten-rfc6112bis-02

Robert Sparks <rjsparks@nostrum.com> Fri, 21 October 2016 15:44 UTC

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Document: draft-ietf-kitten-rfc6112bis-02
Reviewer: Robert Sparks
Review Date: 21 Oct 2016
IETF LC End Date: 2 Nov 2016
IESG Telechat date: Not yet scheduled on a telechat

Summary: Ready with nits

Nits/editorial comments:

Shouldn't the IANA considerations instruct IANA to update the registries 
at 
http://www.iana.org/assignments/kerberos-parameters/kerberos-parameters.xhtml 
to update the three rows that currently point to 6112 to point to this 
document instead (or at least in addition to 6112)?

Micro-nit: There is a 2119 MUST carried forward from RFC6112 that could 
be improved if the group is willing. "Care MUST be taken by the TGS to 
not reveal". I would suggest "The TGS MUST NOT reveal...". If you need 
to further highlight care, add a sentence that says "Implementers need 
to be particularly careful when addressing this requirement." It is a 
very small nit - please feel free to ignore it.