[Last-Call] Re: [Iot-directorate] draft-ietf-iotops-7228bis-07 ietf last call Iotdir review

[jouni korhonen <[e-mail]>]

Hi Carsten,

Thanks for the followup. I am OK with the proposed changes.

regards,
	Jouni

> On 11. May 2026, at 9.50, Carsten Bormann <[e-mail]> wrote:
> 
> Hi Jouni,
> 
> thank you for this review!
> 
> We created a PR trying to cover the editorial improvements you suggested:
> 
> https://github.com/lwig-wg/terminology/pull/21/changes
> 
> On May 7, 2026, at 00:08, Jouni Korhonen via Datatracker <[e-mail]> wrote:
>> 
>> Document: draft-ietf-iotops-7228bis
>> Title: Terminology for Constrained-Node Networks
>> Reviewer: Jouni Korhonen
>> Review result: Ready with Nits
>> 
>> Having read the document I think it is about ready. There are few editorial
>> nits listed that could be fixed, however, they are just for better clarity.
>> 
>> 1) Line 425: What is 'Ps' or rather why it is used here?
>>  - I see there is acronym description in Section 4.1. but its placement still
>>  feels odd here.
> 
> We made the first mention of Ps less abrupt by adding that Ps is a related quantity to the sustained power usage that this section discusses.
> 
>> 2) Line 436: 'Ps' again. A bit confusing since Ps in parenthesis do not refer
>> to an expanded acronym.
>>  - "..of sustained power usage (Ps)."
> 
> This should be covered by the change to the previous item.
> 
>> 3) Line 710: I would provide some literature reference to "Event-based
>> harvesting”..
> 
> This would be deviating a bit from the general style of this document:
> We have been trying not do load down the document with too many references; hundreds like this could be added.
> 
> Type E0 energy harvesting systems have been commercially available for a while, cf.:
> 
> * https://switches-sensors.zf.com/de/wp-content/uploads/sites/7/2024/04/240806_Energy_Harvesting_Generators_datasheet-1.pdf
> * https://switches-sensors.zf.com/de/wp-content/uploads/sites/7/2023/03/2023_3-TS-AFIG-02_03.pdf
> 
> Do you believe that adding a reference like this just for this single item is needed to improve the document?
> 
> (We added a useful search term to the table: “self-powered sensing”.)
> 
>> 4) Line 824: what is an RC oscillator? Reference or expand RC etc.
> 
> We added an expansion (resistor/capacitor).
> 
> 
> Thank you again for reading our document attentively!
> 
> Grüße, Carsten
>