[Last-Call] Suggested edit in Section 1 of draft-ietf-ecrit-similar-location-18

Randall Gellens <rg+ietf@randy.pensive.org> Wed, 02 March 2022 20:44 UTC

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Subject: [Last-Call] Suggested edit in Section 1 of draft-ietf-ecrit-similar-location-18
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Please consider editing the second sentence of the third paragraph of 
Section 1 from:

    When
    incomplete or incorrect civic location information is provided, use
    of this enhancement increases the likelihood that correct and
    complete civic location can be learned.

To:

    Use of this enhancement increases the likelihood that incorrect
    or incomplete civic location will be updated.

Also, as mentioned in an earlier message, please change "location 
servers" to "LoST clients" later in this paragraph.

--Randall