From nobody Sat Jan 2 09:22:09 2021 Return-Path: X-Original-To: last-call@ietfa.amsl.com Delivered-To: last-call@ietfa.amsl.com Received: from localhost (localhost [127.0.0.1]) by ietfa.amsl.com (Postfix) with ESMTP id 9CBBA3A0C7E; Sat, 2 Jan 2021 09:22:03 -0800 (PST) X-Virus-Scanned: amavisd-new at amsl.com X-Spam-Flag: NO X-Spam-Score: -1.848 X-Spam-Level: X-Spam-Status: No, score=-1.848 tagged_above=-999 required=5 tests=[BAYES_00=-1.9, DKIM_SIGNED=0.1, DKIM_VALID=-0.1, DKIM_VALID_AU=-0.1, DKIM_VALID_EF=-0.1, FREEMAIL_ENVFROM_END_DIGIT=0.25, FREEMAIL_FROM=0.001, SPF_HELO_NONE=0.001, SPF_PASS=-0.001, URIBL_BLOCKED=0.001] autolearn=ham autolearn_force=no Authentication-Results: ietfa.amsl.com (amavisd-new); dkim=pass (2048-bit key) header.d=gmail.com Received: from mail.ietf.org ([4.31.198.44]) by localhost (ietfa.amsl.com [127.0.0.1]) (amavisd-new, port 10024) with ESMTP id SzBIQBBOCGSP; Sat, 2 Jan 2021 09:21:58 -0800 (PST) Received: from mail-io1-xd2b.google.com (mail-io1-xd2b.google.com [IPv6:2607:f8b0:4864:20::d2b]) (using TLSv1.2 with cipher ECDHE-RSA-AES128-GCM-SHA256 (128/128 bits)) (No client certificate requested) by ietfa.amsl.com (Postfix) with ESMTPS id EA8C03A0C7C; Sat, 2 Jan 2021 09:21:57 -0800 (PST) Received: by mail-io1-xd2b.google.com with SMTP id 81so21174019ioc.13; Sat, 02 Jan 2021 09:21:57 -0800 (PST) DKIM-Signature: v=1; a=rsa-sha256; c=relaxed/relaxed; d=gmail.com; s=20161025; h=mime-version:references:in-reply-to:from:date:message-id:subject:to :cc:content-transfer-encoding; bh=fJyrTUbovHzFlHqR5uVtc8KigirEArbi4I+s/IXJBog=; b=P9CDjdRXq3S1Tjw1qMPD2wZMZG7UqDYznPEsXpRRbgBTiyDhRgHwP1t1E4oREzBaml sXAMLK7GSJN4u56nhb5lc7FaxeAXhZj1BaxObVPHeaIzBEclDtQjbL0+nVAxzMh0ps57 EcQXPFkrJYP/6Ujo8BOXiOw2FfFpA9pMzYpsN4zEF1Ubcu3TVr3V7KeDcBHR1rqI72oG 5FtnZTahlwWfApub0ABLfE7UH0yJTW/6QmnJ2C7SYhm8iUBO4JMwr+GFLDA78eyDVUAM /H02YOg/6xPJANm+cgaMSAYyUT6ui8QQwCmFxWshir1WCA00Q2NxnYOwr44P0PS4qdmL eYAQ== X-Google-DKIM-Signature: v=1; a=rsa-sha256; c=relaxed/relaxed; d=1e100.net; s=20161025; h=x-gm-message-state:mime-version:references:in-reply-to:from:date :message-id:subject:to:cc:content-transfer-encoding; bh=fJyrTUbovHzFlHqR5uVtc8KigirEArbi4I+s/IXJBog=; b=IIUvqDpbY9tzag17KXmu9ymh8axKL8VV/se1LUVFEdC4MTfWGklrDL685Lcj02JYOF mNXI34/kOjzq36UpbQdAunWh4cFozzp7JZWKAXu2B6ypd23mUtoyTNwyzqjnGH14AU7m xvIQjSuHjfsA5X75LSSgxGorx+HQ/AFnK+HGAguKraRinC4rl1e0R3k6qfoO2gantZw2 bI1r98Ay1kI+d2L5ud+L2anPJTqCS89fxHVi25nariOEX2gQei1j5ywsjADZKRp3FKWe oaRRtnNON+GgXXwrgwxqZucueLRhz5ndH0hx9f/o7gJDwZ5ZgAJMtzVASEfax+Am8Da2 nXXA== X-Gm-Message-State: AOAM530oHbYiozI44QyySnPoGIvBg9wDQ1IQXy/2IKbCa8Pp18tSY0NN +WstFqz0OKlvBGqhRUZ9hX/J1x58swiu/VZg2wTxPATdQ5U= X-Google-Smtp-Source: ABdhPJxiZ9yV6EjvVkzZDEfk3sA9MqE0ue2JXNtNEdtiSDq+Y5efaT8G89FNJDFFBRsRWwpujRoPvQdZotBrBXoLJI8= X-Received: by 2002:a02:2a4f:: with SMTP id w76mr55498291jaw.50.1609608117085; Sat, 02 Jan 2021 09:21:57 -0800 (PST) MIME-Version: 1.0 References: <009501d6cdd2$98623ed0$c926bc70$@chinatelecom.cn> In-Reply-To: <009501d6cdd2$98623ed0$c926bc70$@chinatelecom.cn> From: Donald Eastlake Date: Sat, 2 Jan 2021 12:21:46 -0500 Message-ID: To: Aijun Wang Cc: "iesg@ietf.org" , draft-ietf-teas-pce-native-ip.all@ietf.org, secdir , last-call@ietf.org Content-Type: text/plain; charset="UTF-8" Content-Transfer-Encoding: quoted-printable Archived-At: Subject: Re: [Last-Call] SECDIR review of draft-ietf-teas-pce-native-ip-14 X-BeenThere: last-call@ietf.org X-Mailman-Version: 2.1.29 Precedence: list List-Id: IETF Last Calls List-Unsubscribe: , List-Archive: List-Post: List-Help: List-Subscribe: , X-List-Received-Date: Sat, 02 Jan 2021 17:22:04 -0000 Hi, My apologies for slow response. On Tue, Dec 8, 2020 at 9:26 PM Aijun Wang wrote: > > Hi, Donald: > > > > Thanks for your careful review. > > I have updated the draft according to your suggestions, except one minor = change for the name of the document. > > It seems =E2=80=9CPath Computation Element (PCE) based Traffic Engineerin= g (TE) in Native IP Network=E2=80=9Dis more better? Thanks for making the changes. I agree that adding the word "based" to the title is an improvement. Donald =3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D= =3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D Donald E. Eastlake 3rd +1-508-333-2270 (cell) 2386 Panoramic Circle, Apopka, FL 32703 USA d3e3e3@gmail.com > > I have uploaded the new version on the IETF repository. > > Detail responses are inline below. > > > > > > Best Regards > > > > Aijun Wang > > China Telecom > > > > From: d3e3e3@gmail.com > Sent: Tuesday, December 8, 2020 1:58 PM > To: iesg@ietf.org; draft-ietf-teas-pce-native-ip.all@ietf.org > Cc: secdir ; last-call@ietf.org > Subject: SECDIR review of draft-ietf-teas-pce-native-ip-14 > > > > I have reviewed this document as part of the security directorate's ongoi= ng effort to review all IETF documents being processed by the IESG. Docume= nt editors and WG chairs should treat these comments just like any other la= st call comments. > > The summary of the review is Ready with Issues. > > > > Security: > > This is a very high level Informational document about a general method o= f traffic engineering using multiple BGP sessions and PCE. The Security Con= siderations section is adequate except that I would recommend adding a refe= rence for BGP security, perhaps to RFC 7454. > > [WAJ] Done, thanks. > > > > Other Issues: > > The title of the document doesn't really make it clear what it is about a= nd does not spell out some acronyms. I suggest the following: > > Path Computation Element (PCE) Traffic Engineering (TE) in Native IP Netw= orkNetworks > > [WAJ] Just add one word =E2=80=9Cbased=E2=80=9D to become =E2=80=9CPath C= omputation Element (PCE) based Traffic Engineering (TE) in Native IP Networ= k=E2=80=9D > > > > Editorial: > > There are a number of editorial/typo issues including the curious lack of= any expansion or definition for the first three acronyms listed in Section= 2 on Terminology and what appears to be a line sliced off the bottom of Fi= gure 3. Also, I think a reference should be given where BGP Flowspec is men= tioned in Section 7.1, presumably to the rfc5575bis draft. See attached for= detailed change suggestions in MS Word with tracked changes and, alternati= vely, as a PDF thereof. > > [WAJ] Done, thanks. > > > > Thanks, > > Donald > =3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D= =3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D > Donald E. Eastlake 3rd +1-508-333-2270 (cell) > 2386 Panoramic Circle, Apopka, FL 32703 USA > d3e3e3@gmail.com