[Last-Call] RtgDir Last Call review: draft-ietf-raw-use-cases-05
Victoria Pritchard <pritchardv0@gmail.com> Thu, 01 September 2022 17:25 UTC
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Subject: [Last-Call] RtgDir Last Call review: draft-ietf-raw-use-cases-05
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Hello, I have been selected as the Routing Directorate reviewer for this draft. The Routing Directorate seeks to review all routing or routing-related drafts as they pass through IETF last call and IESG review, and sometimes on special request. The purpose of the review is to provide assistance to the Routing ADs. For more information about the Routing Directorate, please see http://trac.tools.ietf.org/area/rtg/trac/wiki/RtgDir Although these comments are primarily for the use of the Routing ADs, it would be helpful if you could consider them along with any other IETF Last Call comments that you receive, and strive to resolve them through discussion or by updating the draft. Document: draft-ietf-raw-use-cases-05 Reviewer: Victoria Pritchard Review Date: 01/09/2022 Intended Status: Informational Summary: This document is basically ready for publication but has nits that should be considered prior to publication. Comments: This is an interesting and informative draft, clearly identifying use cases and the reliability, availability and latency characteristics which are important to them. Major Issues: No major issues found. Minor Issues: No minor issues found. Nits: Introduction - "by leveraging on lower (L2 and below) capabilities" -> "by leveraging lower layer (Layer 2 and below) capabilities"? - " (RAW) is an effort to provide Deterministic Networking Mechanisms on across a multi-hop path that includes a" - dont need both 'on' and 'across' No terminology / acronyms / abbreviations section - most are actually expanded inside the draft or are very well known but a few I did not understand, e.g.: - APT/TMA TMA/ENR ENR/ORP in figure 1 - FRE in section 6.4 Figure 1 - transceiver appears twice at the bottom left - is one instance meant to be for LDACS GS on the right hand side of the figure? 2 - "while during en-route" --> "during flight" / "while en-route" - don't need both. 2.5.1 - "what it is important is to keep " - "what is important is to keep" 3.1, 4.1, 5.1, etc. the sub-heading title - capital letters needed for "use-case". Should section 2.1 also be "Use-Case Description"? 4.4 - teh -> the 5.1 - Blue-Ray -> Blu-ray 6.4 - "Note thought," -> "Note though," - "Dual/multiple link" - the sentence after this is hard to read, does it mean "due to the competitions, interference is common"? Or "due to the fact that competitions and interference are common"? 7.1 "other time of vehicles" -> "other types of vehicles"? 8.1 "the use of multiples robots" -> "the use of multiple robots" 10 - "Future revisions of this document will include specific text devoted to highlight this non-latency critical requirements." This seems to have already been added as a sub-section for all use cases.
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