Re: [Lsr] Benjamin Kaduk's Discuss on draft-ietf-isis-yang-isis-cfg-40: (with DISCUSS and COMMENT)

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Hi Benjamin,

Thanks for your comment.
Please find some inline answers.
I'm doing the changes as part of the -41.


Stephane

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Subject: Benjamin Kaduk's Discuss on draft-ietf-isis-yang-isis-cfg-40: (with DISCUSS and COMMENT)

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Perhaps the most minor thing that could be Discuss-level, and should be trivial to resolve, but:

The "i-e" leaf in groupings prefix-ipv4-std and neighbor does not say whether boolean value true corresponds to internal or external.
[SLI] Right, I have added the following statement in the description:
"Set to false to indicate an internal metric"


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Section 1

   This document defines a YANG [RFC7950] data model for IS-IS routing
   protocol.

nit: "the IS-IS routing protocol"
[SLI] Fixed

Section 2.8

   This YANG module supports LFA (Loop Free Alternates) [RFC5286] and
   remote LFA [RFC7490] as IP Fast Re-Route (FRR) techniques.  The
   "fast-reroute" container may be augmented by other models to support
   other IP FRR flavors (MRT, TI-LFA, etc.).

If we're going to give examples of other flavors, do we want to have informative references for them?  (This is particularly relevant since we define enumeration values for them in the "alternate-type"
enumeration.)
[SLI] Sounds good, I have added some references.


Section 6

     identity lsp-attached-default-metric-flag {
         base lsp-flag;
         description "Set when originator is attached to
              another area using the referred metric.";

nit(?): I'm not sure whether the "referred" in the description is appropriate given the "default" in the identity name.

[SLI] Fixed

     feature ldp-igp-sync {
       description
         "LDP IGP synchronization.";

nit: the surrounding context suggests that "Support for" would give a more consistent style.  Maybe for auto-cost, te-rid, max-ecmp, lsp-refresh, and admin-control as well.
[SLI] Fixed

     feature nlpid-control {
       description
         "This feature controls the advertisement
          of support NLPID within IS-IS configuration.";

nit: "support for"
[SLI] Fixed

     feature maximum-area-addresses {
       description
         "Support of maximum-area-addresses config.";

nit: s/of/for/

[SLI] Fixed

           leaf alternate-type {
             type enumeration {
               [...]
               enum other {
                 description
                   "Unknown alternate type.";

Do I remember correctly that enumerations are not extensible in the future?  I don't know how relevant that would be here, though.

[SLI] Right, I have changed to identity 


In the "protection-available" container, is there some sort of constraint that two of the alternate-metrics add up to the third?
[SLI] It is not really a constraint from a YANG point of view, these are operational counters.

       container unprotected-routes {
         config false;
         list address-family-stats {

nit: the name/description of address-family-stats doesn't match up with the parent container that just claims to be a list of unprotected prefixes (no stats).

[SLI] I agree, I have changed the address-family-stats to "prefixes"

       list protection-statistics {

side note: I wonder whether the various uint32 leaves are better as
gauge32 than plain uint32.
Also, perhaps the description could mention a relationship bteween total-routes/protected-routes+unprotected-routes, and/or protected-routes/link-protected-routes+node-protected-routes.

     grouping route-content {
       [...]
       leaf-list tag {
         type uint64;
         description
           "List of tags associated with the route. The leaf
            describes both 32-bit and 64-bit tags.";

Are these the admin tags from RFC 5130?  Where is it specified that the
32- and 64-bit variants are just different views into a single consolidated tag namespace?


[SLI] Right, I have added a better description.


     grouping authentication-global-cfg {

I see how "global" is in contrast to a smaller scope (hello, interface, adjacency, etc.) both here and elsewhere, but when we have a global defeault as well as per-level configuration that use the same grouping, it ceases to be universally "global".  But, it's probably too late to be worth changing so many names just for aesthetics...

[SLI] I agree but yes it may be late to start changing this.


       leaf poi-tlv {
         if-feature poi-tlv;
         type boolean;
         default false;
         description
           "Enable advertisement of IS-IS purge TLV.";

nit(?): I thought the purge origin identification TLV was an extension to the generic purge capability but this description ("purge TLV") is very generic.

[SLI] I have enhanced the description to tell that we are talking about the Purge Originator Identification TLV

Should any of the uint32 leaves in "packet-counters" instead be of type counter32?
[SLI] Agree

     grouping spf-log {
       [...]
           leaf id {
             type uint32;
             description
               "Event identifier -  purely internal value.";

Is there anything useful to say about the IDs being chronologically ordered?  (Also applies to the other logs.)
[SLI] I have added a comment to tell that most recent events have the biggest id value.


       container delay-metric {
         leaf metric {
           type std-metric;
           description "IS-IS delay metric for IPv4 prefix";
         }
         leaf supported {
           type boolean;

Should the "metric" leaf be conditional on "supported" being true?
(Same for the other flavors of metric, as well as when they appear later on in the "neighbor" grouping.)


[SLI] This is not a configuration leaf, so I don't think that there is a need for enforcement at YANG level.



       container expense-metric {
         leaf metric {
           type std-metric;
           description "IS-IS expense metric for IPv4 prefix";
         }
         leaf supported {
           type boolean;
           default "false";
           description
             "Indicates whether IS-IS delay metric is supported.";

nit: copy/paste-o delay vs. expense?
[SLI] Fixed

       container error-metric {
         [...]
         leaf supported {
           type boolean;
           default "false";
           description "IS-IS error metric for IPv4 prefix";

I think "Indicates whether [...] is supported" would be more consistent with the sibling nodes.
[SLI] Fixed

     grouping prefix-ipv4-extended {
       [...]
       leaf up-down {
         type boolean;
         description  "Value of up/down bit.";

I assume true means "up", but we really ought to say...
(Also in prefix-ipv6-extended if not more)

[SLI] Fixed


       leaf ip-prefix {
         type inet:ipv4-address;
         description "IPv4 prefix address";
       }
       leaf prefix-len {
         type uint8;
         description "IPv4 prefix length (in bits)";

Doesn't RFC 6991 give us a combined ipv4-prefix type?  (I could imagine that doing string parsing on it is less automation-friendly than the representation here, of course...)
[SLI] Yes, but from a protocol point of view, IPv4 and IPv6 are not combined in the same datastructure. We wanted to keep them separated from a model point of view too.


       leaf-list tag64 {
         type uint64;
         description
           "List of 32-bit tags associated with the IPv4 prefix.";

nit: s/32/64/
[SLI] Fixed

     grouping prefix-ipv6-extended {
       [...]
       leaf prefix-len {
         type uint8;
         description  "IPv4 prefix length (in bits)";

nit: s/4/6/
[SLI] Fixed

       leaf-list tag {
         type uint32;
         description
           "List of 32-bit tags associated with the IPv4 prefix.";
       }
       leaf-list tag64 {
         type uint64;
         description
           "List of 32-bit tags associated with the IPv4 prefix.";

s/IPv4/IPv6/; $s/32/64/
[SLI] Fixed

       container unidirectional-link-delay-variation {
         description
           "Container for the average delay variation
           from the local neighbor to the remote one.";
         leaf value {
           type uint32;
           units usec;
           description
             "Delay variation value expressed in microseconds.";

Is this a standard deviation (variance), mean absolute error, ...?
[SLI] We just mimic what is defined in RFC8570. As the reference is defined in the model. People should refer to it for more details.
Moreover this is a pure operational state.

       container unidirectional-link-loss {
         [...]
         leaf value {
           type uint32;
           units percent;
           description
             "Link packet loss expressed as a percentage
             of the total traffic sent over a configurable interval.";

This document is all about specifying configuration.  How do I configure the interval in question?
[SLI] This is an operational state.

       container unidirectional-link-loss {
         [...]

Is there a relationship worth mentioning amongst the residual, available, and utilized bandwidth?
[SLI] Again, RFC8570 is the reference for additional details.


           container expense-metric {
             leaf metric {
               type std-metric;
               description "IS-IS delay expense metric value";
             }
             leaf supported {
               type boolean;
               default "false";
               description "IS-IS delay expense metric supported";
             }
             description "IS-IS delay expense metric container";

Previously we just used "expense metric" instead of "delay expense metric".

[SLI] Fixed to "expense metric"

     notification lsp-too-large {
       uses notification-instance-hdr;
       uses notification-interface-hdr;

This is probably just for my education and not the document's sake, but both these groupings include a leaf of type 'level' (though for different names).  Are they just always going to have the same value?

[SLI] The instance may be level-1-2, while the interface may be level-2 only.


       leaf reason {
         type string {
           length "1..255";
         }
         description
           "The system may provide a reason to reject the
            adjacency. If the reason is not available,
            an empty string will be returned.
            The expected format is a single line text.";

Wouldn't an empty string be zero-length (which is forbidden by the length restriction)?


[SLI] Fixed by allowing 0 length string


Section 7

I'm happy to see that several of the notifications mandate rate-limiting their generation, in the description text, alleviating any concerns about "spamminess" or DoS due to notification load!  It might be worth a brief mention in the security considerations that that's why the rate-limiting is in place.

[SLI] Sounds good.

   For IS-IS authentication, configuration is supported via the
   specification of key-chain [RFC8177] or the direction specification
   of key and authentication algorithm.  Hence, authentication

nit: s/direction/direct/

[SLI] Fixed

   configuration using the "auth-table-trailer" case in the
   "authentication" container inherits the security considerations of
   [RFC8177].  This includes the considerations with respect to the
   local storage and handling of authentication keys.

I'd consider also noting that the key-chain method is preferred (a listing of why may not be needed and can probably be found in other references).

Appendix A

Please use an address from the blocks reserved by RFC 5737 instead of 1.1.1.1, which is in actual use on the public Internet.

[SLI] Fixed