[Lsvr] Minor fixes for draft-ietf-lsvr-bgp-spf-06 and draft-ietf-lsvr-l3dl-02

Matt Anderson <matt@mattanderson.net> Tue, 01 October 2019 18:16 UTC

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Subject: [Lsvr] Minor fixes for draft-ietf-lsvr-bgp-spf-06 and draft-ietf-lsvr-l3dl-02
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 Proofreading notes from reading these drafts.

draft-ietf-lsvr-bgp-spf-06
- section 2.2  - “… there will be the same unnumber of sessions” should
read “number”.
- section 3.0 - “AF 16388” probably should read “AFI”
- section 4.2.1 - “Link NLIR endpoint prefixes and 1-128 for IPv6” should
read “NLRI”
- section 8.1 - “configuratio” missing an ’n’

draft-ietf-lsvr-l3dl-02
- section 3 - “widrawal” should be “withdrawal”
- section 18.1 - Need to add a word or two after “interfaces” to fix the
grammar, or elsewhere in the sentence.  “Therefore, on multi-link
interfaces MUST continue to send HELLOs as long as they are turned up.”