[martini] Fw: Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-martini-gin-10.txt
"Spencer Dawkins" <spencer@wonderhamster.org> Sun, 07 November 2010 14:57 UTC
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Subject: [martini] Fw: Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-martini-gin-10.txt
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Just to keep the working group in the loop ... and this is good news! Brian, thanks for the review. Spencer, as working group co-chair ----- Original Message ----- From: "Brian E Carpenter" <brian.e.carpenter@gmail.com> To: <draft-ietf-martini-gin.all@tools.ietf.org>; "General Area Review Team" <gen-art@ietf.org> Sent: Sunday, November 07, 2010 2:25 AM Subject: Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-martini-gin-10.txt I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-martini-gin-10.txt Reviewer: Brian Carpenter Review Date: 2010-11-07 IETF LC End Date: 2010-11-18 IESG Telechat date: Summary: Almost ready -------- Minor issue: ------------ The acronym AOR is used 63 times in the draft without being defined, except by implication in the title of reference [18]. This, and the rather abrupt start to the Introduction, makes this a document that is quite hard to get into for an outsider. I know what "SIP" stands for, but it should be expanded in the Abstract, and I'd like to see at least one sentence of introduction to SIP before "One of SIP's primary functions is...". Similarly, in the Introduction: Although the use of REGISTER requests to update reachability information for multiple users simultaneously is somewhat beyond the original semantics defined for REGISTER requests, ... I deduce that REGISTER is a SIP message. But this isn't stated, and I'd have expected a reference to [4], where REGISTER is defined. Again, this is written as an insider document. Once we get past the Introduction the draft seems very thorough and clear, and I (not being a SIP expert) could detect no technical issues.
- [martini] Fw: Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-mar… Spencer Dawkins