[Masque] Lars Eggert's No Objection on draft-ietf-masque-connect-udp-14: (with COMMENT)

Lars Eggert via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> Thu, 16 June 2022 12:40 UTC

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Subject: [Masque] Lars Eggert's No Objection on draft-ietf-masque-connect-udp-14: (with COMMENT)

Lars Eggert has entered the following ballot position for
draft-ietf-masque-connect-udp-14: No Objection

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# GEN AD review of draft-ietf-masque-connect-udp-14

CC @larseggert

Thanks to Christer Holmberg for the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) review
(https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/FOZ1oMqVJD5c0FQlSPgxnoG5qVE).

## Comments

### Section 3.1, paragraph 0
```
  3.1.  UDP Proxy Handling
```
This section as well as Section 6 later in the document have some overlap with
the guidance in RFC8085, specifically, its Section 3. It might be good to align
the guidance.

## Nits

All comments below are about very minor potential issues that you may choose to
address in some way - or ignore - as you see fit. Some were flagged by
automated tools (via https://github.com/larseggert/ietf-reviewtool), so there
will likely be some false positives. There is no need to let me know what you
did with these suggestions.

### Grammar/style

#### Section 3.1, paragraph 3
```
her the destination is reachable. Therefore it needs to respond to the reques
                                  ^^^^^^^^^
```
A comma may be missing after the conjunctive/linking adverb "Therefore".

#### Section 3.6, paragraph 2
```
located within a given HTTP namespace but MAY be allocated in any order. The
                                     ^^^^
```
Use a comma before "but" if it connects two independent clauses (unless they
are closely connected and short).

#### Section 9.1, paragraph 12
```
ke to thank Eric Rescorla for suggesting to use an HTTP method to proxy UDP.
                              ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
```
The verb "suggesting" is used with the gerund form.

## Notes

This review is in the ["IETF Comments" Markdown format][ICMF], You can use the
[`ietf-comments` tool][ICT] to automatically convert this review into
individual GitHub issues. Review generated by the [`ietf-reviewtool`][IRT].

[ICMF]: https://github.com/mnot/ietf-comments/blob/main/format.md
[ICT]: https://github.com/mnot/ietf-comments
[IRT]: https://github.com/larseggert/ietf-reviewtool

[Masque] Lars Eggert's No Objection on draft-ietf… Lars Eggert via Datatracker
Re: [Masque] Lars Eggert's No Objection on draft-… David Schinazi