[mile] CSIRT draft nits

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From: "Nancy Cam-Winget (ncamwing)" <ncamwing@cisco.com>
To: "mile@ietf.org" <mile@ietf.org>, "draft-ietf-mile-rolie-csirt.authors@ietf.org" <draft-ietf-mile-rolie-csirt.authors@ietf.org>
Thread-Topic: CSIRT draft nits
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Date: Mon, 23 Dec 2019 22:17:33 +0000
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Subject: [mile] CSIRT draft nits
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Hello authors,
I am doing the shepherd writeup for your draft and ran into some nits (see below) that I’d like to see addressed before I submit.
Please let me know when a new version’s up and I can submit it for publication.
Thanks and Happy Holidays!

Here are the nits:
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