[MIPSHOP-MIH-DT] FW: [Mipshop] WG last call on MIHsolution document(draft-ietf-mipshop-mstp-solution-01.txt)
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Kevin, Would you mind forwarding these comments to the mipshop mailing list, so that I can send my reply there too (I do not want to send the reply without the original mail, as that would look out of context). Thanks! - gabor >> -----Original Message----- >> From: Noll, Kevin [mailto:kevin.noll@twcable.com] >> Sent: Thursday, February 14, 2008 7:30 PM >> To: Telemaco Melia (tmelia) >> Cc: Nada Golmie; Subir Das >> Subject: RE: [Mipshop] WG last call on MIH solution >> document(draft-ietf-mipshop-mstp-solution-01.txt) >> >> >> Telemaco, >> >> I've been lurking on the MIPSHOP list for a while, but have not been >> active in any of the conversations regarding this draft. I also do >> not consider myself an expert on the subject matter, so I'm not >> posting comments to the list. >> >> I do, however, have some minor comments regarding this draft if you >> could forward them to whomever is appropriate. >> >> >> >> 1. Sect. 3.4 para 1 - spelling error >> "exist both in hom enad in visited" should be "exist both in home and >> in visited >> >> 2. Sect. 4 para 6 - grammar >> "The MN could know or not the realm" could be better stated as "The >> MN could know or not know the realm" or "The MN might or might not >> know the realm" >> >> 3. Sect. 4 para 6 - spelling >> "The dynamic assignation methods " should be "The dynamic assignment >> methods" >> >> 3. Sect. 4 para 6 - clarify >> If the MoS is statically configured, why wouldn't the realm also be >> statically configured? >> Perhaps this clarification isn't important in this "Overview" >> section, but I'm just reading it from top to bottom. >> >> 4. All sections - spelling/grammar >> The singular form of "case" is often used where the plural form >> should be used. For example, in Sect. 4.1 para 3, "In case where " >> should be "In cases where ". Optionally the singular form could be >> used if the phrase is changed to "In the case where". >> >> 5. Sect. 4.2 - clarify >> What does "and invariant to interface IP addresses" mean? >> >> 6. Sect. 5 para. 3 - grammar >> "similarly to what " would be better stated as "similar to what is >> specified " >> >> 7. Sect. 5 para. 4 - clarify >> "In case MoS is provided in a remote network other than visited or >> home network (scenario S4)" might be better stated as "In the case >> that MoS is provided by a third-party network (scenario S4)" >> >> 8. Sect. 5.1 para. 1 - grammar >> "as shown inFigure 6a." should be "as shown in Figure 6a." >> >> 9. Sect. 5.1 para. 1 - technical >> I'm not sure I agree with the statement that "Home domains are >> usually pre-configured in the MN". On what basis is this assumption >> made? Even if it is a correct assumption, shouldn't there be a >> provision for the scenario where the MN does *NOT* have the home domain pre-configured? >> >> 10. Sect. 5.2 para. 3 - grammar/omission Paragraph ends with "it MUST >> use that address in the reverse". I think it is meant to be "it MUST >> use that address in the reverse DNS query". >> >> 11. Sect. 5.2 Title - nit-pick >> Should "MIN" be "MN"? >> >> 12. Sect. 5.2 para. 3 - nit-pick >> "Reverse dns query" should be "Reverse DNS query" (DNS should be >> capitalized, I think) >> >> 13. Sect. 5.2 para. 3 and 4 - technical Perhaps the authors can >> clarify what the expected result of the reverse DNS query should be. >> It seems to me that it would not be uncommon for the reverse query >> (if it doesn't fail altogether) to return a domain name that is not >> the same as the desired MoS realm name. For example, what if the >> reverse query returns something like >> node1234.dulles.va.myprovider.net, but the MoS realm should be >> myprovider.net? Should the MN attempt to contact the MoS based on the >> returned domain name and remove portions of the domain name >> iteratively until it successfully finds an MoS? >> >> 14. Sect 5.3 para 2 - grammar >> "described in section Section 5.1" should be "described in section 5.1" >> (redundant word "section") >> >> 15. Sect 5.3 para 3 - grammar >> "Similarly to" should be "Similar to" >> >> 16. Sect 5.3 para 4 - technical >> What is the document references by "[REF TO NEW DOC]"? >> >> 17. Sect 5.3 para 11 - grammar/clarify Does "the MoS information will >> anyway be sent to the AAAV" mean "the MoS information will always be >> sent to the AAAv"? >> >> 18. Sect 5.3 - technical >> This discovery method seems to assume the use of IPv6 and DHCPv6, but >> does not state that assumption anywhere that I can find. Even if this >> is the correct assumption, what happens if only IPv4 and DHCPv4 are >> available to the MN? >> >> 19. Sect. 5.4 - technical >> Why can the MoS domain name not be pre-configured? >> >> 20. Sect 5.4 para 1 - grammar >> "network as inFigure 9" should be "network as in Figure 9" >> >> 21. Sect. 5.4 - technical >> Would an alternative method of discovering the third party MoS be >> similar to that described in sect. 5.3 where the AAAh and/or AAAv are >> able to return the third party MoS information? >> >> 22. Sect 6. para 1 - clarify >> What does this sentence mean? "The client MAY use the DNS discovery >> mechanism to discover which transport protocols are supported by the >> server in addition to TCP and UDP." >> >> 23. Sect 6.1 para 1 - grammar >> "between 50 to100 bytes " should be "between 50 to 100 bytes " >> >> 24. Sect 6.1 para 1 - nit-pick >> "wasted bandwidth utilization" should be "wasted bandwidth" or "poor >> bandwidth utilization" ... it doesn't make sense (grammatically) to >> "waste utilization". >> >> 25. Sect 6.5 para 1 - grammar >> "particular transport.." should be "particular transport." (one >> ending >> period) >> >> 26. All sections - nit-pick >> There is inconsistent use of "MOS" versus "MoS". "MoS" (with >> lowercase >> "o") is defined in Section 2. >> >> 27. Sect 6.5 para 2 - technical >> Why is the MN not required to support UDP? >> >> 28. Sect 7. para 1 - grammar >> "MIH user requests for an IS service" should be "MIH user requests an >> IS service" or "MIH makes a request for an IS service". >> >> 29. Sect. 7. para 2 - technical >> There seems to be an assumption of DHCPv4 being in use. Is this correct? >> What if DHCPv4 is not available? >> >> 30. Sect. 7. para 2 - technical >> Is it also be possible for the MN to receive the MoS address in DHCP >> initialization? In other words, rather than waiting some period of >> time after the MN has obtained its initial IP configuration to send a >> request via DHCPINFORM, the MN could request the MoS option request >> in a DHCPDISCOVER/DHCPREQUEST and receive the MoS address in the >> DHCPOFFER/DHCPACK. >> >> Of course, this assumes the MN is using DHCP to initialize the IP >> parameters. >> >> 31. Sect. 7 para 2 - grammar >> "The message arrives to the source" should be "The message arrives at >> the source" >> >> 32. Sect. 8. para 2 - grammar >> "In case where " should be "In the case where " >> >> 33. Sect. 8. para 2 - grammar >> "of DHCP messages are required" should be "of DHCP messages is required" >> >> 34. Sect. 8. para 2 - grammar >> "it is recommended that network administrators should use DHCP >> authentication option described in [RFC3118], where" >> should be >> "network administrators should use the DHCP authentication option >> described in [RFC3118] where" >> >> 35. Sect 8 para 2 - grammar >> "This will also protect the denial of service attacks to DHCP server." >> should probably be >> "This will also protect the DHCP server against denial of service >> attacks." >> >> 36. Sect 8. para 3 - grammar >> see #32 >> >> 37. Sect. 8 para 4 - grammar >> "In case where reliable " should be "In the case where a reliable " >> >> 38. Sect. 8 para 4 - nit-pick >> "a specific > transport" should be "a specific transport" >> >> >> >> >> >> --kan-- >> -- >> Kevin A. Noll, CCIE >> Sr. Wireless Engineer >> Time Warner Cable >> 13241 Woodland Park >> Herndon, VA 20171 >> o: +1-703-345-3666 >> m: +1-717-579-4738 >> AIM: knollpoi >> >> >> -----Original Message----- >> From: mipshop-bounces@ietf.org [mailto:mipshop-bounces@ietf.org] On >> Behalf Of Vijay Devarapalli >> Sent: Wednesday, February 13, 2008 6:37 PM >> To: 'Mipshop' >> Subject: [Mipshop] WG last call on MIH solution >> document(draft-ietf-mipshop-mstp-solution-01.txt) >> >> Hello folks, >> >> This is to announce a working group last call for the MIH solution >> document (draft-ietf-mipshop-mstp-solution). You can find the >> document at the following URL. >> >> http://www.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-ietf-mipshop-mstp-solution-01. >> txt >> >> The last call expires on March 5 2008. (Its a three week last call >> because of Internet Draft submission deadlines on the 18th and 25th). >> >> The intended status for this document is Standards Track. >> >> Please post any issues or comments on this document to the MIPSHOP WG >> mailing list. In case you have reviewed the document and found no >> issues, please send an email saying you support advancing this document. >> >> Vijay >> _______________________________________________ >> Mipshop mailing list >> Mipshop@ietf.org >> http://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/mipshop >> This E-mail and any of its attachments may contain Time Warner Cable >> proprietary information, which is privileged, confidential, or >> subject to copyright belonging to Time Warner Cable. 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