[MMUSIC] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-mmusic-dtls-sdp-26

Paul Kyzivat <pkyzivat@alum.mit.edu> Fri, 07 July 2017 20:10 UTC

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Subject: [MMUSIC] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-mmusic-dtls-sdp-26
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area 
Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the 
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Document: draft-ietf-mmusic-dtls-sdp-26
Reviewer: Paul Kyzivat
Review Date: 2017-07-07
IETF LC End Date: 2017-07-24
IESG Telechat date: TBD

Summary:

This draft is basically ready for publication, but has a few nits that 
should be fixed before publication.

Issues:

Major: 0
Minor: 0
Nits:  4

(1) NIT:

Section 5.3: s/Eventhough/Even though/

(2) NIT:

Section 8: s/aTLS/a TLS/

(3) NIT:

Section 8: What is the point of including the example? I don't see how 
it adds anything. Perhaps worked out O/A examples contrasting the 
differences between the new and existing cases might be marginally 
helpful. (But IMO not enough to bother with.)

(4) NIT:

Section 10.3.2: s/Througout/throughout/