[MMUSIC] Francesca Palombini's No Objection on draft-ietf-mmusic-rfc8843bis-04: (with COMMENT)

[Francesca Palombini via Datatracker <[e-mail]>]

Francesca Palombini has entered the following ballot position for
draft-ietf-mmusic-rfc8843bis-04: No Objection

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COMMENT:
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Thank you for the work on this document.

Thanks to Claudio Allocchio for the ART ART review: I agree with him that
mentioning IETF 110 in Section 1.4 seem strange, and I would suggest rewording
to remove that. Additionally in the same section, mentioning erratas by their
numbers does not help a reader who is not familiar with the IETF errata
reporting system: instead, I would suggest to rephrase so to give a high level
summary to the reader about what these erratas were about.

Below, two nits I happened to notice.

Francesca

## Nits

1. ----

   *  In a subsequent offer, or in an answer (initial of subsequent),

FP: s/of/or

2. ----

   If the
   answer wants to move the "m=" section out of the BUNDLE group, it
   will have to first accept it

FP: s/answer/answerer