Re: [MMUSIC] Francesca Palombini's No Objection on draft-ietf-mmusic-rfc8843bis-04: (with COMMENT)

Christer Holmberg <christer.holmberg@ericsson.com> Thu, 26 August 2021 17:41 UTC

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From: Christer Holmberg <christer.holmberg@ericsson.com>
To: Francesca Palombini <francesca.palombini@ericsson.com>, The IESG <iesg@ietf.org>
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Subject: Re: [MMUSIC] Francesca Palombini's No Objection on draft-ietf-mmusic-rfc8843bis-04: (with COMMENT)
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Hi Francesca,

Thank You for the review! Please see inline.


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COMMENT:
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>Thanks to Claudio Allocchio for the ART ART review: I agree with him that mentioning IETF 110 in Section 1.4 seem strange, and I would suggest rewording to remove that.

I can remove the sentence.

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>Additionally in the same section, mentioning erratas by their numbers does not help a reader who is not familiar with the IETF errata reporting system: instead, I would suggest to
>rephrase so to give a high level summary to the reader about what these erratas were about.

The erratas were fixing a couple minor editorial and reference nits, so I don't think we need to describe those.

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>Below, two nits I happened to notice.
>
>Francesca
>
>## Nits
>
>1. ----
>
>   *  In a subsequent offer, or in an answer (initial of subsequent),
>
>FP: s/of/or

Will fix as suggested.

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2. ----

>   If the
>   answer wants to move the "m=" section out of the BUNDLE group, it
>   will have to first accept it
>
>FP: s/answer/answerer

Will fix as suggestd.

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Regards,

Christer