[Mobopts] Draft-irtf-mobopts-l2-abstractions

Hi John,

I believe the authors have addressed your review comments.
Could you kindly take a look at the following revised version and let us
know if we could move forward with publishing this ID?

http://tools.ietf.org/id/draft-irtf-mobopts-l2-abstractions-04.txt

Thank you.

-Rajeev

> 
> ------ Forwarded Message
> From: ext John L <johnl@iecc.com>
> Date: Fri, 27 Jul 2007 16:00:06 -0400 (EDT)
> To: Rajeev Koodli <rajeev.koodli@nokia.com>
> Cc: Aaron Falk <falk@bbn.com>
> Subject: Mobopts review
> 
> I've read through draft-irtf-mobopts-l2-abstractions-03, and I find it
> almost but not quite ready for publication.
> 
> Keeping in mind that I am not particularly expert in mobile computing,
> the content seems fine.  It needs a careful copy-edit to fix some
> language problems that are distracting and occasionally ambiguous.  For
> example, page 6 defines PoA as "the attachment point of a mobile node".
> PoA presumably stands for Point of Attachment, and it just seems odd to
> have the abbreviation and definition not match.  More seriously, there are
> places where the complexity of English syntax leads to confusion.  For
> example, on page 3 the last sentence of the first paragraph reads "a
> layer can evenly communicate with each other", which I think is trying to
> say that the communication between layers is symmetrical, but I'm not
> sure.  A careful copy edit, in consultation with the authors to be sure
> the ambiguities are resolved correctly, should solve this.
> 
> Appendix B appears to contain two paper examples and one report of an
> experiment.  They're all fine, but it would be helpful to explain either
> why they tested the third example or why they didn't test the first two.
> 
> None of these problems are major, and I expect all could be fixed in one
> more editing pass.
> 
> Regards,
> John Levine, johnl@iecc.com, Primary Perpetrator of "The Internet for
> Dummies",
> Information Superhighwayman wanna-be, http://www.johnlevine.com, ex-Mayor
> "More Wiener schnitzel, please", said Tom, revealingly.
> 
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