[mpls] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-mpls-rsvp-shared-labels-06

Russ Housley <housley@vigilsec.com> Fri, 30 November 2018 18:29 UTC

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Reviewer: Russ Housley
Review result: Ready

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Document: draft-ietf-mpls-rsvp-shared-labels-06
Reviewer: Russ Housley
Review Date: 2018-11-30
IETF LC End Date: 2018-12-11 
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready

Major Concerns:


Minor Concerns:

Section 5.3: To understand this section, I had to learn about "loose
hops" from other sources.  Please consider adding this term to the ones
that are defined in Section 2.


Throughout document: s/hop by hop/hop-by-hop/

Section 5.3.1: s/The net result is that by/As a result, by/