[mpls] Re: AD review for draft-ietf-mpls-mna-fwk-10
Tony Li <tony1athome@gmail.com> Tue, 08 October 2024 19:30 UTC
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Subject: [mpls] Re: AD review for draft-ietf-mpls-mna-fwk-10
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Jim, Thank you for your comments. I’m away from my sources right now, so I cannot make any changes. I will attend to this as soon as I’m able. Thanks, Tony > On Oct 7, 2024, at 2:12 PM, James Guichard - james.n.guichard at futurewei.com <mailforwards@cloudmails.net> wrote: > > Dear Authors, > > Thank you for a nicely written and easy to digest document. I have minimal comments as follows (note I have used the line numbers from nits for v-10 to highlight where in the document the comment is relevant): > > 26 operational models and capabilities of MPLS networks. Some of these > 27 actions are defined in existing MPLS specifications, while others > 28 require extensions to existing specifications to meet the > 29 requirements found in "Requirements for Solutions that Support MPLS > 30 Network Actions (MNA)". > > Jim> I assume that the above sentence is talking about I-D.ietf-mpls-mna-requirements but as it is in the abstract it cannot contain a citation. Perhaps remove this last sentence as it is repeated and clarified in the Introduction section (?). Note also that I-D.ietf-mpls-mna-requirements is now RFC 9613 so please update this document throughout to reflect this. > > 137 MNA technologies may redefine the semantics of the Label, Traffic > 138 Class (TC), and Time to Live (TTL) fields in an MPLS Label Stack > 139 Entry (LSE) within a NAS. > > Jim> Please expand on NAS. I realize that it is defined in the terminology section, but it took me a minute to find it and stop scratching my head. > > 221 | MSD | Maximimum SID | [RFC8491] | > > Jim> s/Maximimum/Maximum > > 266 Label.[RFC6790] > > Jim> s/.[RFC6790]/[RFC6790]. > > 280 * In-Stack Data (ISD): A set of zero or more LSEs that carry > 281 ancillary data for the network actions that are present. Network > 282 action indicators are not considered ancillary data. > > Jim> should Post-Stack Data (PSD) also be defined here for completeness (?)