[mpls] Shepherd Writeup for draft-ietf-mpls-sfl-framework

Tarek Saad <tsaad.net@gmail.com> Wed, 09 October 2019 04:45 UTC

Return-Path: <tsaad.net@gmail.com>
X-Original-To: mpls@ietfa.amsl.com
Delivered-To: mpls@ietfa.amsl.com
Received: from localhost (localhost [127.0.0.1]) by ietfa.amsl.com (Postfix) with ESMTP id E8F0C1200FE; Tue, 8 Oct 2019 21:45:53 -0700 (PDT)
X-Virus-Scanned: amavisd-new at amsl.com
X-Spam-Flag: NO
X-Spam-Score: -1.998
X-Spam-Level:
X-Spam-Status: No, score=-1.998 tagged_above=-999 required=5 tests=[BAYES_00=-1.9, DKIM_SIGNED=0.1, DKIM_VALID=-0.1, DKIM_VALID_AU=-0.1, FREEMAIL_FROM=0.001, HTML_MESSAGE=0.001, RCVD_IN_DNSWL_NONE=-0.0001, SPF_HELO_NONE=0.001, SPF_PASS=-0.001] autolearn=ham autolearn_force=no
Authentication-Results: ietfa.amsl.com (amavisd-new); dkim=pass (2048-bit key) header.d=gmail.com
Received: from mail.ietf.org ([4.31.198.44]) by localhost (ietfa.amsl.com [127.0.0.1]) (amavisd-new, port 10024) with ESMTP id KU-vW6MbEGFB; Tue, 8 Oct 2019 21:45:52 -0700 (PDT)
Received: from mail-ed1-x531.google.com (mail-ed1-x531.google.com [IPv6:2a00:1450:4864:20::531]) (using TLSv1.2 with cipher ECDHE-RSA-AES128-GCM-SHA256 (128/128 bits)) (No client certificate requested) by ietfa.amsl.com (Postfix) with ESMTPS id 06396120071; Tue, 8 Oct 2019 21:45:49 -0700 (PDT)
Received: by mail-ed1-x531.google.com with SMTP id r4so778506edy.4; Tue, 08 Oct 2019 21:45:48 -0700 (PDT)
DKIM-Signature: v=1; a=rsa-sha256; c=relaxed/relaxed; d=gmail.com; s=20161025; h=from:to:cc:subject:thread-topic:thread-index:date:message-id :accept-language:content-language:mime-version; bh=VEKVVSkbiUhG2MDNuqj3G8P/DW2fMeVpVjxTxEvZmJY=; b=QnTauGMVwvQmsGZ4Zb1NqluRapBUEdKLhTm3jUfilK3bhd+kw1anZmRMSJ99C2a7h8 xmf3cMwrJ1P8uY0OyvtQtmeepvfd7pu0HSHlXPKqNDN4ycpfpF+BNnAfy7deOMsNbPtV JkdzUnpTP1lxv6LzV3jUejVE5yPa1IT7giB+rx32CUCotlJkaZ5KPl/+Meoa7sCMZEE8 yrRT/ZSCZ7wLyzfk7wEu9n7z9MwfJOik5lqSEkyoKYql7dWRffHgwKhazhnuuug6QFvD 2Ha+y3R5aT3TF3QWNa6A8Qcp4FRakT4Z8KpMZlsLKKM0gtfLPn3y2ULl29xW8CjVpkgH H1qw==
X-Google-DKIM-Signature: v=1; a=rsa-sha256; c=relaxed/relaxed; d=1e100.net; s=20161025; h=x-gm-message-state:from:to:cc:subject:thread-topic:thread-index :date:message-id:accept-language:content-language:mime-version; bh=VEKVVSkbiUhG2MDNuqj3G8P/DW2fMeVpVjxTxEvZmJY=; b=o6pSwp3B9zBSGWJ16hef9K+N9gsMRb4/EU8GPg9V+nM4nuwmCuv6zFVhRqH3OvTC4H Ka/HKouEzu/ucfCdHlluFtIpg0ehTFRjbKtXo95tpkwuj6QeJQdmWzbJbcTO9Xso4cbF yne80C2rVRBb0RicOSdQWR2pl4HQfqZrc39iviz0eNvdjjUmB91dVXWI23wJFzmANbta oJMHB6KJtZ/awTeAtPig236ls0PEyqq/p4LRMNWW241kOtic1ah7RI3a130V6kn4BlBa T6dhw2UrZvBlT2ApNB+hop66ubCt77XouU7ERO31RV7ReXo0HeU5FNopwrpJl68HVkVP xvcg==
X-Gm-Message-State: APjAAAWZ8B46c7YmvVKija+a+NOB8beI9umz1KzIXBJyvDpUJ3u00XQC b5YlXm24dmYhgoeUupnEVkVaItPl
X-Google-Smtp-Source: APXvYqztRACF4kAWwkz9ichzn8iIXu0krISULlStkFrVhVtj/uPYuQF4nfaowmxoXqMKUFaZoD9baA==
X-Received: by 2002:a17:906:1505:: with SMTP id b5mr1026269ejd.195.1570596347138; Tue, 08 Oct 2019 21:45:47 -0700 (PDT)
Received: from DM6PR19MB3689.namprd19.prod.outlook.com ([2603:1036:301:21db::5]) by smtp.gmail.com with ESMTPSA id g9sm104845ejj.51.2019.10.08.21.45.45 (version=TLS1_2 cipher=ECDHE-RSA-AES128-GCM-SHA256 bits=128/128); Tue, 08 Oct 2019 21:45:46 -0700 (PDT)
From: Tarek Saad <tsaad.net@gmail.com>
To: "draft-ietf-mpls-sfl-framework@ietf.org" <draft-ietf-mpls-sfl-framework@ietf.org>
CC: MPLS Working Group <mpls-chairs@ietf.org>, "mpls@ietf.org" <mpls@ietf.org>
Thread-Topic: Shepherd Writeup for draft-ietf-mpls-sfl-framework
Thread-Index: AQHVflxpdX/aZLY27ky9XchjYWRd9Q==
X-MS-Exchange-MessageSentRepresentingType: 1
Date: Wed, 9 Oct 2019 04:45:44 +0000
Message-ID: <DM6PR19MB3689E9C23A8084D5C5AAC0F1FC950@DM6PR19MB3689.namprd19.prod.outlook.com>
Accept-Language: en-US
Content-Language: en-US
X-MS-Has-Attach:
X-MS-Exchange-Organization-SCL: -1
X-MS-TNEF-Correlator:
X-MS-Exchange-Organization-RecordReviewCfmType: 0
Content-Type: multipart/alternative; boundary="_000_DM6PR19MB3689E9C23A8084D5C5AAC0F1FC950DM6PR19MB3689namp_"
MIME-Version: 1.0
Archived-At: <https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/mpls/geszaCp14LW7MiCJ85xruesHsnI>
Subject: [mpls] Shepherd Writeup for draft-ietf-mpls-sfl-framework
X-BeenThere: mpls@ietf.org
X-Mailman-Version: 2.1.29
Precedence: list
List-Id: Multi-Protocol Label Switching WG <mpls.ietf.org>
List-Unsubscribe: <https://www.ietf.org/mailman/options/mpls>, <mailto:mpls-request@ietf.org?subject=unsubscribe>
List-Archive: <https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/browse/mpls/>
List-Post: <mailto:mpls@ietf.org>
List-Help: <mailto:mpls-request@ietf.org?subject=help>
List-Subscribe: <https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/mpls>, <mailto:mpls-request@ietf.org?subject=subscribe>
X-List-Received-Date: Wed, 09 Oct 2019 04:45:54 -0000

Hi authors,

I have reviewed this document and took a first stab at the SWU at:
https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-mpls-sfl-framework/shepherdwriteup/

Please review and let me know if you have comments before I move forward with this.
Below are some nits that I think should be corrected too:

Nits from my review:
1) abstract:
s/on the on the/on the

2) Introduction:
s/see (Section 2)/see (Section 3)

3) Section 5
s/This is turn/This in turn

Regards,
Tarek