[mpls] AD review of draft-ietf-mpls-tp-p2mp-framework

"Adrian Farrel" <adrian@olddog.co.uk> Sat, 28 December 2013 21:39 UTC

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Thanks for this document.

I have done my usual AD review on receiving the publication request
and I find just a couple of nits that can be rolled into the IETF
last call which I will start forthwith.



Dan will probably want to update his coordinates.


You don't need to be so enthusiastic with your acronyms in Section 1.2
The following are "well known" according to

   GMPLS   Generalized MPLS
   LDP     Label Distribution Protocol
   MPLS    Multiprotocol Label Switching

There is a serial comma missing from
   OAM     Operations, Administration and Maintenance
The comma is also missing in your text.


In Section 1.3 you say

   There is no definition for MPLS TE-LSP support of multipoint-to-
   multipoint connectivity and none is anticipated.

Without opening up a discussion of whether what you cay is true, can you
say why it is relevant? Perhaps "This document is limited to a 
discussion of point-to-multipoint function and does not discuss 
multipoint-to-multipoint support." You might also move this to Section