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[mpls] Re: Document shepherd review of draft-ietf-mpls-mna-usecases-10

Greg Mirsky <gregimirsky@gmail.com> Thu, 11 July 2024 01:07 UTC

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Hi Tony,
Thank you for your kind words and thoughtful consideration. I've asked for
help and prepared a new version based on the feedback I received. Please
find attached the new working version and the diff highlighting updates,
which include fixed typos and editorial changes to improve the readability
of the document.

Regards,
Greg

On Tue, Jul 9, 2024 at 5:37 PM Tony Li <tony.li@tony.li> wrote:

> [WG chair hat: on]
>
> Hi all,
>
> I have completed the document shepherd review of your document and have
> found no significant issues.
>
> The document has several editorial issues that could be addressed. While
> these do not affect the technical status of the document, these would
> improve its quality and will hasten the process when it gets to the RFC
> Editor. I’m well aware that developing a technical document in a non-native
> language is extremely challenging, so I would like to recommend that you
> enlist the aid of a professional Technical Writer or a native English
> speaker within your own organizations and ask that they make a full pass
> through the document for correctness, clarity, and flow. This step is
> optional.
>
> Regards,
> Tony
>
>

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