Re: [Mtgvenue] Ben Campbell's Yes on draft-ietf-mtgvenue-iaoc-venue-selection-process-15: (with COMMENT)

[Pete Resnick <[e-mail]>]

Hi Ben,

I think the 3.2.3/3.3 mismatch is strictly editorial: I believe the 
intent was to have them both use the 3.2.3 language.

Other editorial points noted. Thanks.

pr

On 6 Jun 2018, at 14:00, Ben Campbell wrote:

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> Thanks for this. Most of my comments are already covered, but here's a 
> few:
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> Substantive:
>
> §3.2.3 and §3.3: The first section says that the cost of "open and 
> unfiltered
> internet" in public spaces and guest rooms in "typically" included in 
> the room
> price. But the latter simply says they are included.  Is that the 
> intenti? It
> seems odd for the overflow hotels to be held to a higher standard than 
> the
> meeting hotel.
>
> Editorial and Nits:
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> §1, 2nd paragraph: " the IASA to apply their " - Plural disagreement. 
> (It looks
> like a mix of the US English tendency to treat organizations as 
> singular
> entities and the British English tendency to treat them as plural 
> collectives ).
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> §7: The last sentence seems disconnected from the rest of the 
> paragraph; I
> suggest a separate paragraph.